Hey, they should have a story feedback section in this place!

[Flagg]

I'm very keen to hear what people think of this one. I'm personally quite keen on it and was over the moon when it got an "E" though the voting has been quite disappointing. Also my only feedback so far has been "Don't give up the day job" which was somewhat lacking in constructive qualities in my opinion.

I don't mind people not liking it but would like to hear intelligent comments.

Thanks.

Life Drain

P.S. Its non-erotic before you start unzipping.

 

[KillerMuffin]

Hey, I liked it! Lovely story. Just poignant. One wonders how often people get the message like that?

 

[Flagg]

Actually it is erotic, there's a bit in it where a boy anally rapes his mother (maybe that will get a response)

 

[Merelan]

Hey, someone edited out that part!

No, truly. It was thoughtful, as in, made me pause and think. Makes me wonder, about those nameless people we pass. Are they really there? Or, drifters from another plane? Or lost.

 

[Flagg]

Hey, someone edited out that part!

Damn that Laurel! As if there's anything wrong with a five year old raping his mother! Godamn censorhip!

Thanks for the feedback Merelan and thanks for the vote too

 

[Merelan]

What the hell is this site coming to anyways? Geesh... next thing you know she will be editing out the parts involving sex and tortoises.

 

[Flagg]

I know! And yet she has the cheek to call herself an animal lover!

 

[Svedish_Chef]

Flagg I thought it was fucking brilliant... and yes I know I'm sick but it was..

Oh was that feedback... sorry!

 

[Svedish_Chef]

Flagg I thought it was fucking brilliant... and yes I know I'm sick but it was..

Oh was that feedback... sorry!

 

[HeroticaRiter]

I hope my constructive critiscism helps! The story was tragically beautiful, and my mind in particular was drawn to the cross, which sent me the message that God is the light in all horrific situations. Aside from those, the story was a little ummmm, well, it reminded me of those scary stories where the guy takes a hitchiker home, gives her his scarf, goes to the house the next day, the girl is dead, goes to her grave and there's his scarf. Ya know? But it was a good story, and never believe those ho say it isn't, that's only an opinion of a person.

 

[Laurel]

I know! And yet she has the cheek to call herself an animal lover!

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