hetero-centered FemDom Story looking for Beta readers

[Heliopheres]

Hello, I have a mostly Femdom (hetero) story (in English) in progress (I have written about 3300 words so far). I need a second pair of eyes experienced with this kind of situations. Maybe I give too many information or too little in the story; maybe a Domme would never act that way; such things. I just want to know if I can just write on or need to change a few things before I can continue. Please PM me.

Here as an extract the first three paragraphs:

Things changed when I turned eighteen. My mother was a single mom back then as my father had died as US Marine in Iraq before I turned fourteen, so my mother had to earn the money and gave me to Aunt Samantha under the week. Samantha Jones wasn’t my real aunt, she was one of my mom’s eldest friends and we always spoke of her as Auntie Sam or Aunt Samantha.

What my mom did not know was that Auntie Sam loved men in a quite odd way and had a small private business going on in downtown while living in uptown, in one of the better neighborhoods just like mom and I did, actually just two blocks away from us.

Looking back from what I know today, Auntie Sam had been looking at me quite differently since I had obvious signs that my body was changing during puberty. And I was having a hell of a puberty, easily aroused, easily horny and having a fast hand if necessary.

EDIT:
Sorry, I had the PM options set to Buddies, Mods and Admins only. Now everyone can send me PMs. I just checked now. So sorry.

 

[Heliopheres]

I just wanted to say, I have a beta-reader now. Thanks for all the requests.

 

[LairOfTheCougar]

Sounds like it has potential for a fun story.