Her Big 'O' - the noises ??

[Handley_Page]

How does one describe, with reasonable accuracy, the noises made by the Lady in the story as she climaxes ?

"Aa r r - ", - "Eee e ee" and "M m m mmmm"
and so on doesn't quite cut the mustard, I suspect.

As a matter of accuracy, my late wife hardly made much noise, although I suspect having the kids in the next room may have gone some way towards it.

 

[lovecraft68]

How does one describe, with reasonable accuracy, the noises made by the Lady in the story as she climaxes ?

"Aa r r - ", - "Eee e ee" and "M m m mmmm"
and so on doesn't quite cut the mustard, I suspect.

As a matter of accuracy, my late wife hardly made much noise, although I suspect having the kids in the next room may have gone some way towards it.

Personally, I shy away from the phonetics of people coming.

when I read a story, things like that sort of annoy me, so I never do it. I think it looks silly(IMO)

So I do things like "she released a long shuddering moan" "she squealed in pleasure" etc....

 

[bashfullyshameless]

I like to do a little of both. It's probably more elegant to use descriptive language ("moaned loudly"), but an occasional "Mmmhh!" or a long "oooh" are fine. It's when it gets into caps that stretches halfway across the text block that it gets stupid.

 

[PennLady]

I'm with bash and LC. I try to use descriptive terms -- hissed out a breath, gasped, drew in a shaky breath -- as opposed to writing out the sounds. Because I also tend to think it looks dumb, and it makes the characters look dumb to me as well. That said, the occasional "Aaah," or something like that isn't a bad thing.

 

[sr71plt]

Bash and LC didn't post the same thing. I'm with Bash. An occasional sound can bring the reader more into the urgency of the moment. I don't really know the best sound for a woman's orgasm though. As Bash posted, I mix description with sound usually.

 

[Stella_Omega]

It a case of tell rather than show, for me. Or, suggest, so that the mind's eye and ear can do the showing.

"She made a sound like a flock of birds."

"She cried out and clutched at me, shuddered and cried out again. Eventually, I regained my senses enough to peel her claws out of my ribcage."

Or,

"Suddenly, all the noise stopped. In complete silence, she rolled up into me, banging her head against my sternum-- and flopped back into the red sheets with a sigh of repletion."

 

[lovecraft68]

I do put in some "Oh's or an ahh's" I just don't get into anything beyond that.

I will do some dialogue along the lines of "Oh, fuck yeah!" she screamed.

but that long string of vowels that some people use are what I shy away from.

 

[1sickbastard]

I use a combination of descriptive text and phonetics to convey an orgasm. LC & Stella both make great points, but like Bash, I try to put into text whatever sensory stimulii I have in my mind.

Whatever method used, out purpose is to engage the readership to the point they experience the story as if they were inside said story, regardless of technique.

 

[lovecraft68]

My wife reads a lot of stories on here and I always know when she finds one that has the over the top ridiculous noise/sound effects, because she'll start laughing and yell out.

"Oh baby, oh baby, oh baby, Oh I'm cummmmmmmminnnnnnnnng!

Thing is, is dumb as it sounds, if she keep sit up, it makes me want her, so maybe there is something to be said for it

 

[sr71plt]

different strokes for different folks.

I try not to tell folks they have to do it my way.

 

[Dual_Triode]

I agree with Stella that the moment is best left to the narrator to describe using metaphors. A little dirty talk in the lead-in dialog is okay and pretty natural, but trying to capture the throws with dialog winds up sounding as silly as a B porn movie.

Some things my narrator has observed:

"Sounding like a banshee, her shrieking howl filled the kitchen. Jon ignored the demon’s attempt to deceive, holding her down, continuing his exorcism. The second and third eruptions soon followed, as expected."

"Her face was contorted with obvious pleasure when Marla sucked her clit and lost her hand inside of her pussy. Leslie was nowhere near as vocal as Marla, her big moment marked only by paralysis and apnea."

 

[lovecraft68]

From SWB chapter one a good example of my norm.

I came like an animal, head back, mouth wide open and wailing like a banshee.

 

[bashfullyshameless]

Here's the one reason I sometimes narrate even dialogue: there are people (I have to presume just as many men as women) who sound really silly when having their orgasms, and getting descriptive would blow the mood.

If you're with someone who literally monologues while getting off (and by that I mean a string of obscenities, not the Gettysburg Address), or someone who howls... well, the reality of it may be hot, may be distracting, but as a written event it's bound to look silly.

Reading "She begged and demanded more in an involuntary whine with a string of profanity worthy of a shipyard" is gonna be way less mood-breaking than actually reading said monologue.


(I am continually reminded of Randall in Clerks: "People say weird shit during sex. One time I called this girl 'Mom.'" But then I remember I'm on Literotica... le sigh...)

 

[sr71plt]

I agree with Stella that the moment is best left to the narrator to describe using metaphors. A little dirty talk in the lead-in dialog is okay and pretty natural, but trying to capture the throws with dialog winds up sounding as silly as a B porn movie.

Some things my narrator has observed:

"Sounding like a banshee, her shrieking howl filled the kitchen. Jon ignored the demon’s attempt to deceive, holding her down, continuing his exorcism. The second and third eruptions soon followed, as expected."

"Her face was contorted with obvious pleasure when Marla sucked her clit and lost her hand inside of her pussy. Leslie was nowhere near as vocal as Marla, her big moment marked only by paralysis and apnea."

In first person, you don't have a narrator.

 

[Darkniciad]

I mix them up, as others have said.

When I use phonetics, I stick fairly close to a rule of a maximum of three repeating letters, if I use any at all, and almost never repeat more than one letter.

I trend toward stuttering l-l-letters

 

[PennLady]

Bash and LC didn't post the same thing. I'm with Bash. An occasional sound can bring the reader more into the urgency of the moment. I don't really know the best sound for a woman's orgasm though. As Bash posted, I mix description with sound usually.

I know they didn't post the same thing. Doesn't mean I can't agree with them both on things.

 

[sr71plt]

I know they didn't post the same thing. Doesn't mean I can't agree with them both on things.

Well, no, not if what they posted didn't agree. You didn't pick and choose among what they had posted.

But whatever.

 

[sr71plt]

I mix them up, as others have said.

When I use phonetics, I stick fairly close to a rule of a maximum of three repeating letters, if I use any at all, and almost never repeat more than one letter.

I trend toward stuttering l-l-letters

I sometimes repeat words/phrase. "And entered and entered and . . ."

Really whatever is occurring to me at the time to push the emotion I want, I'll use. I don't write outside the action looking in. I write inside the action.

 

[lovecraft68]

Here's the one reason I sometimes narrate even dialogue: there are people (I have to presume just as many men as women) who sound really silly when having their orgasms, and getting descriptive would blow the mood.

If you're with someone who literally monologues while getting off (and by that I mean a string of obscenities, not the Gettysburg Address), or someone who howls... well, the reality of it may be hot, may be distracting, but as a written event it's bound to look silly.

Reading "She begged and demanded more in an involuntary whine with a string of profanity worthy of a shipyard" is gonna be way less mood-breaking than actually reading said monologue.


(I am continually reminded of Randall in Clerks: "People say weird shit during sex. One time I called this girl 'Mom.'" But then I remember I'm on Literotica... le sigh...)

I was with a woman years ago who literally howled, fucking hottest thing I've ever heard.

 

[Darkniciad]

I sometimes repeat words/phrase. "And entered and entered and . . ."

Really whatever is occurring to me at the time to push the emotion I want, I'll use. I don't write outside the action looking in. I write inside the action.

I'll do that in the narrative as well, trying to give a sense of the pace in the action with the wording.

I'm really fond of a longer-than-average paragraph of description with sights, sounds, smells, sensations, and emotions coming right up to the brink of release.

Then dropping down a line for the sudden explosion.

 

[TE999]

I use a mix, such as:

Description; 'Her back arched as she climaxed, mouth wide open in an ecstatic scream of release'.

Dialogue: "Fuck me, goddamn you, fuck me harder, I'm gonna ...Yeeee!"

An occasional "Ahhhh" or a "Nnnghh" works too.

 

[SevenSquared]

I tend to prefer description. I don't mind when people write non-English words as approximations of sounds, like a "Ahhhh" or a "Nnnghh" but what I really hate and is a real turn-off is when people use English words but add extra vowels in them to illustrate the word is drawn out by the speaker.

 

[YDB95]

Reading "She begged and demanded more in an involuntary whine with a string of profanity worthy of a shipyard" is gonna be way less mood-breaking than actually reading said monologue.

I'm going to have to disagree. I think a well-written vocalaization of that would go over very well. Now, the key there is well-written, and not all of us are up to that, of course. But that holds with telling as well as showing.

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

I do it altogether different: When Daphe climaxed the old maid in the apartment below thumped the ceiling with a broom handle, and the kids outside stopped jumping rope. "I think she maybe stubbed her toe," one of the girls said.

 

[SydneyBlake]

I was with a woman years ago who literally howled, fucking hottest thing I've ever heard.

I did NOT howl. I was just trying to tell you that the chandelier was breaking.
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JOKE! Red, that's a joke!



I agree with most of the posters here. Spelling out the phonetics is silly. That said, I've caught myself having done it, and boy, do my eyes roll....