help with story

[somedayYours]

Hello to all; i'm a new author with an interest primarily in bdsm. i've submitted a story, but it was declined, and i was hoping maybe someone here who is a little more experienced in writing and grammer might take a look at it and offer some suggestions. Please! i don't mind brutal *g* as i am here to learn. The online editors are not available, although i did take the time to look through the submission guidelines and straighten out what i thought was wrong.

Thanks in advance for considering this! *s*

somedayYours

 

[KillerMuffin]

Why was it declined? If you don't know, click the link where it says "rejected" and it will tell you.

 

[pop_54]

Hi

If you run a simple Microsoft Word spell / grammar check that should do the trick on that front.

Did you ensure good layout, paragraphs etc, not just a big lump or story, I think they'rs rejecting on layout as well now.

Of course have you written in any under 18's, that's a fail straight away, even if they aren't screwing.

pops............If all else fails look for an editor on the forum.

 

[somedayYours]

plea for help

Hi, and thank you both.

They said to check under "how to make your characters talk." i'm guessing that some of the quotations were buried inside the paragraphs. i don't think the paragraphs were overly long. i'll try the grammer spell check on microsoft; i wasn't familiar with that, but did run it through the yahoo spell check.

i was rather surprised it was rejected. i've read stories on literotica for years and thought mine was pretty well done. *blushes* But then i read elsewhere that someone said most stories are only rejected if blatently inferior! i'll check on the forum for editors, but my understanding is that there are currently none available, and literotica is in the process of revamping the editorial help.

Thanks,

someday Yours

 

[pop_54]

OK kid

Anytime love, if you have major probs, drop me a line, even e mail a sample section of the story, I'm no expert but I'll see if anything glowingly obvious is wrong.

pop_542002@yahoo.co.uk.

See ya kid: pops................

 

[kristydoll]

I don't have the time I used to...but if you can't find someone to help you out - I probably can.

~plus for the fact, that bdsm is one of my favorite categories~

kristy

 

[openthighs_sarah]

Hello to all; i'm a new author with an interest primarily in bdsm. i've submitted a story, but it was declined, and i was hoping maybe someone here who is a little more experienced in writing and grammer might take a look at it and offer some suggestions.

I don't mind taking a look, SY... unless we're talking about a complete novel? Finding someone to thoroughly edit the story might take a while, but I'll be happy to look it over and give you suggestions on what might be causing a rejection (if I can spot them).


sarah

 

[KillerMuffin]

Okay, that helps. You were rejected because of the formatting of your dialogue.

Your dialogue probably looks something like this:

"Hello," she said. "Hi, yourself. How are you doing?" "I'm fine. I'm just going to lunch, want to come?" He smiled, "I'd love to!"

It should look like this:

"Hello," she said.

"Hi, yourself. How are you doing?"

"I'm fine. I'm just going to lunch, want to come?"

He smiled, "I'd love to!"

One person speaking per paragraph, period. You may also want to look at your punctuation. There are two ways to do it:

American:

"Hello," she said.

British:

'Hello,' he said.

 

[somedayYours]

dialogue

Hi,

*smiles* sounds like you hit the nail on the head; i've gone through it already and corrected what i could see was wrong; so hopefully i'm on the right track.

 

[openthighs_sarah]

Re: dialogue

Hi,

*smiles* sounds like you hit the nail on the head; i've gone through it already and corrected what i could see was wrong; so hopefully i'm on the right track.

I PM'd you back with my ten-cent critique... beautiful story.

A suggestion -- when you do post it, it might be fun to put this up for discussion in the 'Story Discussion Forum', just to see how other authors feel about the issues I mentioned in the PM.