Help with English.

ertustar

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Hello. I hope someone will help me and find (and correct) mistakes in this short text. I will be very grateful.

ps. If you want anything translated into polish I 'll gladly help! :)
I hope this won't be trated as a serious spam... <afraid>

text:

Mr. Daniel Rozberg is typical example of exemplary citizen of Magowo city. As a representative of Magowo authorities – vicemayor - I have been in contact with local teenagers and with Mr. Daniel, who proved to be a responsible person. He has been securing local events, parties and sports competitions – as a lifeguard. As physiotherapy student he proved to be professional and patient towards his patients during voluntary services in civic hospital.
He can easily eastablish human relations and he is disciplary and creative person.
As a Vicemayor of Magowo city I fully recommend Mr. Daniel as a trustworthy person, who will surely cope with all required tasks and will be able to met expectations of most demanding employer.
I have met Mr. Daniel during ceremonies organized at school in which he have been learning. As a member of school self-governemt he had frequent contact with city authorities. During my visitations at school I had an opportunity and pleasure to to enter into communication with Mr. Daniel and carry out several conversations. I have no stipulations to this person.
 
With all the English teachers around here I'm surprised that this hasn't gotten more attention.
 
I don't think English teacher is required to help. :) All I need is to correct those major mistakes that I am sure are hiding somewhere in this text :)

I hope someone will help me. :rose:
Please.
:eek:
 
To whom it may concern,

Mr. Daniel Rozberg is a typical example of an exemplary citizen of Magowo city. As a representative of the city of Magowo as Vicemayor I have been in contact with local teens and with Mr. Rozberg, who has proved to be a responsible person. Mr. Rozberg has been securing local events, parties and sports competitions as a lifeguard and as a physiotherapy student he has proved himself to be professional and patient towards his patients during voluntary services in the civic hospital. Mr. Rozberg can easily establish human relations and he is a disciplined and creative person.

As a Vicemayor of Magowo city I fully recommend Mr. Daniel as a trustworthy person, who will surely cope with all required tasks and will be able to meet the expectations of his employers.

I have met Mr. Daniel during ceremonies organized at the school in which he has been learning. As a member of school self-government he had frequent contact with city authorities. During my visits at the school I had the opportunity and pleasure to enter into communication with Mr. Rozberg and carry out several conversations. I have no stipulations to Mr. Rozberg.
 
It's not perfect but only one of our english teachers could really do it justice.
 
My corrections are in italics. I'm not an English teacher, but I'm working on a master's degree in English, so maybe I'll qualify to work on it, LOL. :)

Mr. Daniel Rozberg is a typical example of an exemplary citizen of Magowo City. As a Vice-mayor of Magowo City, I have been in contact with local teenagers and with Mr. Daniel, who has proven to be a responsible person. As a lifeguard, he has been securing local events, parties, and sports competitions. As a physiotherapy student, he has proven to be professional and understanding with his patients during his voluntary service in the civic hospital. He can easily eastablish human relations, and he is disciplary(Not sure what this word is supposed to be. Disciplinary? If so, you might to rethink the word choice there because it doesn't fit well with the sentence.) and creative person.

As a Vice-mayor of Magowo city, I fully recommend Mr. Daniel as a trustworthy person who will surely cope with all required tasks and will be able to met the expectations of the most demanding employer.

I have met Mr. Daniel during ceremonies organized at the school he attends. As a member of the school's self-government, he has frequent contact with city authorities. During my visits to the school, I have had the opportunity and pleasure to speak with Mr. Daniel on several occasions. I have no objections to this person. (No objections to doing what with this person? I think you mean hiring him, but I didn't want to put words in your mouth! I would specify, though, what you have no objection to.)

Ok, if that didn't make any sense, let me know. I just couldn't figure out the best way to do it. Hope that helped. :)
 
Many thanks to you Betticus and BiBunny! It is really helpful!

:heart:


ps.If you'll need some help with Polish just call me. :p
 
Quick question - are you the only vice-mayor or is there more than one? :)
 
BiBunny said:
My corrections are in italics. I'm not an English teacher, but I'm working on a master's degree in English, so maybe I'll qualify to work on it, LOL. :)

Mr. Daniel Rozberg is a typical example of an exemplary citizen of Magowo City. As a Vice-mayor of Magowo City, I have been in contact with local teenagers and with Mr. Daniel, who has proven to be a responsible person. As a lifeguard, he has been securing local events, parties, and sports competitions. As a physiotherapy student, he has proven to be professional and understanding with his patients during his voluntary service in the civic hospital. He can easily eastablish human relations, and he is disciplary(Not sure what this word is supposed to be. Disciplinary? If so, you might to rethink the word choice there because it doesn't fit well with the sentence.) and creative person.

As a Vice-mayor of Magowo city, I fully recommend Mr. Daniel as a trustworthy person who will surely cope with all required tasks and will be able to met the expectations of the most demanding employer.

I have met Mr. Daniel during ceremonies organized at the school he attends. As a member of the school's self-government, he has frequent contact with city authorities. During my visits to the school, I have had the opportunity and pleasure to speak with Mr. Daniel on several occasions. I have no objections to this person. (No objections to doing what with this person? I think you mean hiring him, but I didn't want to put words in your mouth! I would specify, though, what you have no objection to.)

Ok, if that didn't make any sense, let me know. I just couldn't figure out the best way to do it. Hope that helped. :)


eastablish? Do you mean establish?
 
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