Help with a screenplay synopsis?

[Varian P]

I plan to enter a screenplay I've written in a contest.

If the synopsis/treatment is well received, they'll put the script in front of a Hollywood producer.

So I need to make the synopsis good. Right now, I fear it's bad (I have the hardest time writing blurbs, synopses, any kind of promotional stuff--way harder than writing an actual story, IMO).

Generally, I just need to know if the synopsis gives you a clear sense of what happens in the story. Is it compelling?

Also, I know some of you are pros, having submitted plenty of your own stories to publishers for consideration, so any suggestions would be greatly appreciated.

If anyone's willing to take a look, send me a PM and I'll get it to you--it's less than a page/400 words (what?! Varian wrote something that's less that a million words long?!).

Eternal gratitude, degrading favors, etc., etc., shall be yours.

-V

 

[neonlyte]

I plan to enter a screenplay I've written in a contest.

If the synopsis/treatment is well received, they'll put the script in front of a Hollywood producer.

So I need to make the synopsis good. Right now, I fear it's bad (I have the hardest time writing blurbs, synopses, any kind of promotional stuff--way harder than writing an actual story, IMO).

Generally, I just need to know if the synopsis gives you a clear sense of what happens in the story. Is it compelling?

Also, I know some of you are pros, having submitted plenty of your own stories to publishers for consideration, so any suggestions would be greatly appreciated.

If anyone's willing to take a look, send me a PM and I'll get it to you--it's less than a page/400 words (what?! Varian wrote something that's less that a million words long?!).

Eternal gratitude, degrading favors, etc., etc., shall be yours.

-V

Yep ... PM me, we do this sort of thing on STORY

 

[Varian P]

Yep ... PM me, we do this sort of thing on STORY

A PM is on the way--thank you.

 

[Liar]

If you want a second opinion, I could take a look. I do a lot of script writing, although not for movies.

 

[Varian P]

Lovely--I'll get it right over to you via PM.
Thank you.