Help with a bdsm scene

[MrHappy212]

I posted this in the BDSM Cafe but no one wants to respond there so I'm posting again here.

Halloween party with a sex dungeon in the basement guy chains up his slutty half sister and takes out some frustration with a cat o nine tails before fucking her silly.

Need someone experienced to let me know if its too much/not enough. How can I show that she wants it but still have her struggle in the beginning? As it is it borders on being non con....

let me know if interested and I'll send the google doc link

2,600 words

 

[HeyAll]

If you want, you can PM it to me and I'll spend a few moments glancing at it, then I can give you a few quick thoughts.

 

[MrHappy212]

thank you for taking a look