help me

[danston]

iv got this idea for a story but im useless at writing, a guy (dan) goes to a nightclub wiv his new hot girlfriend (rachel), and he bumps into the man (dan's former best friend chris), who his last girlfriend cheated on him wiv, he tells his new girlfriend about it, so she hates the other guy at first but through the night he ends up seducin her.

let me know if there are ways to improve this, i think rachel should cheat on the danbehind his back, maybe he gets called away to go to work and rachel says she has spotted friends so she wants to stay, then chris makes his move.

or should chris seduce her on the dancefloor while she is dancin wiv dan?

if there is any talented authors out there maybe we can come up wiv this story together?

 

[damppanties]

Please stop writing wiv for with. It's... very bad. And when I say very bad, I'm being very restrained in my response.

 

[scriptordelecto]

I believe the place you want to post this thread is here.

 

[danston]

sorry about the spelling

and im just looking for some help from experienced authors to make the story a good one, am i stilli n the wrong forum?

 

[wehstar]

try story ideas forum.

 

[damppanties]

sorry about the spelling

and im just looking for some help from experienced authors to make the story a good one, am i stilli n the wrong forum?

You could get a bite here too, but it would be better if you posted your request in the forum scriptodelecto linked.

 

[drksideofthemoon]

if there is any talented authors out there maybe we can come up wiv this story together?

Sorry, there are no talented authors here...just us hacks and wannabes...