Help making BDSM story more real

[justhisgirl]

I am working on my first story and could really use some help on making this ho hum story worth reading. I think with a little guidance I can focus my thoughts more clearly and be happy with the final product. The story involves a new military recruit and finding her submissive side. thanks to all for looking

 

[sarahmiller]

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I might be able to help'

 

[justhisgirl]

if you would not mind I can send you what I have and see what you think.