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Kettle Corn

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Hey guys, any opinions would be great. I feel I am going into sex to fast and it lacks depth, it gets the job done :) , but I could do better



Winona Ryder screwed up again. She had awhile back been sentenced to picking up trash and doing community service for robbing a store. Well she did it again. She robbed a store again and this time was facing jail time. At his point the trial was about to close, and Winona was obviously guilty, and made a last ditch effort to stave off jail.

Deliberation Room

Eight men were in the jury. They all agreed that Winona was guilty, but a surprising thing happened. Winona Ryder strolled into the room. She had on a white cotton shirt on with no bra and a pair of short shorts. Her hair was not done and her hair was dark black. I contrasted with her pale white skin, but was still sexy. Her breasts were bouncing freely inside her shirt. Her legs were long and slender and waiting to be caressed. Winona’s ass was bursting out of her shorts.
“Well guys, what is it going to take for me too not get convicted”
The jury was speechless, what did she mean by that?
“Any suggestions?”
One of the men got the message.
“Well, you could suck us all off” The man said
“What a great idea” Winona said
She began undressing, beginning with her shirt. Her breasts were pretty large, and bounced happily. She took off her shoes, and shimmied off her shorts, releasing her ass from its bondage. She strolled to the man who got the message and knelled in front of him; her eyes gleamed and looked up at him. Her breasts were pressed against his legs creating massive cleavage. Her ass was out and was fuckable. One of the jurors came up behind her and slapped her ass
“Ohh, please fuck my ass”
The man unzipped his pants and pressed the head of his penis against here forbidden hole. At the same time, she went down on the man sitting down, making loud slurping sounds
“OH MY GOD, YOUR STREATCHING ME OUT”
“I am going to cum in your ass bitch”
The man getting the BJ just sat with his eye closed pushing Winona head down on the penis. The other men decided the wanted some too. Two men went to Winona and unzipped. Winona’s hands were free so she decided to give handjobs to them. She clasped her hands around the two cocks and pumped them up and down. Her head continued to bob up and down, while sucking the cock, her muffled moans echoed through the room.
“Winona, I… think…I am going to cum”
He had anticipated that she would stop blowing his cock and receive a facial, but she continued sucking. His cock began squirting semen down her throat; she began gagging at the taste, but continued swallowing. He pulled out of her throat. Cum dripped from her lip as she looked into his eyes.
“Anyone else want a blowj—OH, OH, OHHHHHHHHH!!!”
The guy fucking her in the ass began literally slamming the hole. Winona’s face was strained and she was moaning like there was no tomorrow.
“I going to cum, here it comes” The guy said.
He pulled and forced Winona to receive a facial. He had a massive load, and showed it. The first shot landed in her mouth, and she swallowed. The second on her nose, the third on her eyes, and the guy put his cock into her mouth and made her swallow the rest. Two guys down, six left. A couch was in the room and she wanted to finish them all off. She went to the couch.
“Both you guys lie on the couch, and make it so your balls are touching each others”
The guys did as she said and both there dicks wafted in the air. She never did a double entry at the same time, but she wanted to get this over with. She straddled both cocks. One going into her asshole and the other into her pussy.
“OH MY GOD, YOU GUYS ARE FILLING ME UP”
She rocked up and down, here boobs going up and down with her. The two guys left walked up to her. She decided to try something. She made them press there cocks together and attempted to suck both of them off at the same time. The two guys getting the blowjob weren’t gay, but didn’t seem to mind. Meanwhile, the two guys taking her ass and pussy were pumping her with abandon. The two guys taking her mouth were close. She was hungry for cum, she was a whore. She coaxed them to cum.Winona braced for the load of spunk about to go down her throat. Suddenly, they both blasted twin wads of sperm down her throat. She made obscene slurping sounds as the cum shot down her mouth and into her throat. Some much cum was present, that it began to seep out of her mouth. The two men pulled there cocks out of her stretched mouth. There cocks glistened with each others cum, and her spit.
“You guys have great tasting cum but… but… but… oh… Oh…OH, OH, OH OHHHHHHHHHHH.”
It came on her suddenly that she was having an orgasm. Her cum went all over both there cocks and she climaxed. The to guys weren’t that far off.
“Come on, shot a wad of your cum up my ass!!!!!”
He didn’t need further encouragement, and blasted a load up her ass. She suddenly climaxed again, her bucking and moaning cause the other guy to cum. There cum mixed and intermingled and the movement stopped. The man pulled out. Winona was a mess. Her face was caked in cum and sperm was still seeping out of her mouth. Out of her ass and pussy cam a lot of cum.
“Not guilty, OK?”
The only thing the jurors could do was nod.
 
Kettle,

A couple things. The Author's Hangout isn't the place to go for critiques or feedback on your story. Your best bet is probably the Story Feedback Forum.

There are no paragraph breaks in your story. Odds are you had some but they vanished due to Lit's formatting. You can add some by going to edit and then manually creating a space between each paragraph. That's a pain but it should increase your readership.

Good luck.

Rumple Foreskin :cool:
 
Rumple Foreskin said:
Kettle,

A couple things. The Author's Hangout isn't the place to go for critiques or feedback on your story. Your best bet is probably the Story Feedback Forum.

There are no paragraph breaks in your story. Odds are you had some but they vanished due to Lit's formatting. You can add some by going to edit and then manually creating a space between each paragraph. That's a pain but it should increase your readership.

Good luck.

Rumple Foreskin :cool:

I typed it on word and then pasted it over, I put paragraphs in but... Well thanks for the advice
 
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