goth-eros poetica

[darkmaiden]

these are some of my works (poesys) of dark erotica....


Night Song
words: 118
lines: 27

at night he slips through my window
cool air caressing me like a lover's moist tongue

I shiver new awakening
moaning a rhapsody of vowels
and consonants like tombstones
his lips of bittersweet agony
bruising tender flesh
as I lay impaled by lust
and hear the sound of my heart beating
druming blood through my viens

his love is wild like wolf-song
howling at the pregnant moon
his voice is smooth as liquid velvet
as he sings his soothing lullaby
hush hush hush my pretty pretty one

until the dawn bleeds from darkness
tangerine rays grazing my cooling flesh
and he flees like the shadow of a dream
leaving silence in his wake

***

[spam removed by laurel]

The Dreaming

Midnight wakes beneath a mystic moon
as ominous mists waltz dewy down
the nocturnal dance of mothwings beating
soft staccatos and whispered wind
the spirit of a shape transforming
like a ghost of velvet shadows
through a lattice silently creeping
into a window open to the night
steals between the gauzy drapes
to find the sleeper
lost in slumber
dreaming, dreaming, dreaming.

She watches as his soul lies hid
slack-jawed and lashes fluttering
lost in the nebulous expanse of dreams
the rise and fall of his shallow breathing
she sighs sweet syllables in his ear
from bloody lips smiling deeply
whispers caress his naked skin
moonpale gooseflesh shivering
his mouth opens to her poisoned kiss
his breath captured as he is waking
eyes open wide to the terrible sight
dreams to night terrors transforming
she drinks his spirit red like wine
as his voice is
screaming, screaming, screaming.

 

[KillerMuffin]

Oookay...

Not visiting your site, thanks for reading the FAQs for the rules.



I'm not terribly sure what you want here.

Feedback?
Spamming?
Sharing?
Poetry circle?

We like to be friendly here, but it requires interaction for that to work.

 

[darkmaiden]

ummmmm... so sorry...

i was only hoping to post my writing for feedback... sorry you took offense to it. i'm not sure why.

i did read the rules and it said nothing about sharing the link to your site with others... if you don't want to go there fine... maybe others do.

and, this is not a very friendly welcome. if i am to share, then what better way than to send in a submission with a link to my site so people can get to know me?

is this not interaction?

I'm not terribly sure what you want here.

Feedback?
Spamming?
Flaming?

well i won't sink to that level. thankyou so humbly for the "feedback".

goodnight...

duana

 

[KillerMuffin]

I'm not exactly known for my tact. For being incredibly rude, I sincerely apologize. Just went and read the FAQ, imagine my shock when I saw no posted forum rules. How rude.

Spam happens a lot here and it's not permitted. Links to personal sites are allowed, but they're generally not put up in a post, which is why I was curious as to your intentions. We get spammed a lot here by people who want to steal our words or send us to sites that have dozens of pop ups or worse.

And I didn't give you feedback. I never give feedback that isn't specifically asked for. I'm not tactful and I'm rude. I don't subject people's writings, particularly poetry, to my opinion unless they ask for it.

You never know what people want unless they ask for it, sometimes.

You don't specifically ask for something, you aren't going to get what you don't ask for, particularly when we don't know you very well. People are sensitive about their work and offending by offering unwanted criticism is always the precursor to a nasty fight.

Sink to whatever level you wish. In my defense, your post reads like an advertisement.

 

[duana]

thank you for your appology... i think...

i'm sorry my post reads like an advertisement... it is in a way. as a writer i hope to continue to build a loyal readership. i always lists my web address when posting or emailing anywhere. if people choose to visit, so be it. i think of it as shameless self promotion.

on the other hand, i totally hate spam and spammers having my fair share of repetative and useless pornographic junk mail... i don't think i was spamming...

if you had have decided to visit my site, you would have found a site desing by a visual artist (me) with my own original poetry, stories, art, photography, audio, etc... no pop-up windows, or stupid adverts. no fees, no memberships, no porn, no crap... it is pretty straightforward. it is a personal homepage only with my stuff on it...

i do however understand your concerns over spam artists, and spamming. i am usually wary myself. but i see nothing really in my post that would be considered spam... only friendly hello, here's my shit, here's my site, respond if you wish...

as for being tactless on your part, i prefer jumping the gun. your concerns are valid. but, i think you may have considered addressing me in a knder, gentler manner.

but, hey... i'm tough enough, and i can take. i wear combat boots when i fuck. i can drink my spouse under the table and i've never lost an arm wrestle or a verbal bashing...

...as for specifically asking for feedback, being a newbee here, i was unaware of any protocal regarding this. i figured i'd throw it out and see what response i would get... and what a response i got...

these poems were already published and were for viewing pleasure only... if someone wanted to respond and tell me what a goddess of words i am, then i wouldn't be upset. but otherwise, it was for entertain purposes only....

if i wished for a crit, i would ask specifially for one. thanks anyways...

<People are sensitive about their work and offending by offering unwanted criticism is always the precursor to a nasty fight. >

yes i agree... so you didn't critque my work, instead you you sent me a nasty email... i hope this is not a "precursor to a nasty fight"...

anyway... no harm done. i'm forgiving... we've all said our sorries so lets move on...

duana

BTW= enjoyed many or you audio stories....

 

[KillerMuffin]

Email? I didn't send an email. You got an email from me? What domain server was listed as my address? This bothers me.

I intend, in all actuality, to back off and be nice now. You look like a smart, well spoken person. It's fabulous to have people like you here and I would never ever want to run someone like you off over something that turns out to be non-existent beyond my own little imagings after all.

I think that we'll get used to each other, and on the forum proper. We're pretty laid back here. I see you've already dipped your toe in and I hope you find it comfortable here, my leaping to conclusions aside.

 

[duana]

thankyou

i feel welcome now..
duana

OH... the message boards sends me an auto=respond from the forum to my email, so you didn't actually email me specifically, but i got email notifying me that you had responded. not quite the same though, so my faux-pas...

have a good night...

duana

 

[KillerMuffin]

I was off to bed, but a friendly bit of advice before I go.

First, go to user cp, edit options, and scroll down to "use email notification by default." Make sure it's set at no and submit changes.

Then go back to every post you've made and edit them, down at the bottom below the reply screen is a few radio buttons, make sure that email notification is de-selected in each one.

Otherwise you'll be inundated with these annoying emails every single time a new post is made to any thread you've posted in.

 

[P. B. Walker]

Darn... I was waiting for an good ole knock down drag out cat fight... and ya'll done made up already... geez. Just another male fantasy... what can I say... LOL. Besides being bored and totally awake at 2:40 in the AM.

- PBW

 

[Guest]

Duana,

Welcome to the board. I unlike KillerMuffin and Daughter in most cases do not wait for an invite. My intent is not to wound, I will not attack you. Often my opinions are harsh, but know that I care about your poem. I pick and choose what I want based on whim and the loose structure on the threads.

My opinion is basically if it's posted somewhere on this site, then I can have at it. I will often use a poem to illustrate a skill or technique, form etc. I sometimes use a poem just to show what not to do. But you will always know why I felt the way I did.

again welcome to the group.

U.P.

 

[duana]

thank you for the welcome...

i believe it is important for writers to gain valuable feedback from their peers and readership. writing is most often a solitary existance, which is why most of us i think feel the need to reach out and publish our work... not for the recognition, but to be able to share a piece of ourselves, and perhaps connect with someone else on a deeper more meaningful level.

i critique for several writer's groups & am assistant editor at BrilliantSmut, where i offer i hope thoughtful critism to other writers. as a writer myself, i am careful not to pick on the content of a piece, but rather the mechanics, how the piece worked and how it could be improved. whether i personally like it or not is irrelevant. but i am open to most forms/styles and content, and prefer to encourage writers to polish their work and hone their skill...

i can remeber what it was like starting out writing, have a passion to explore styles and wordplay, yet not having the technique or skill. i had many editors at the time encourage me, and offer their ideas on improving my stories. one story was rejected 5 times, rewritten over & over with the help of feedback, until it became my first published work, a story much different than the first series of drafts. since then it has been published several times, and i still like the story, so i'm thankful for the help and insight i recieved from the kind editors who spent their time offering me feedback...

i hope i can be of some value here as well.

i am a fulltime student and work parttime in a gallery... besides that, i do my photography, film, video installations, writing & publishing, so i'm always busy. but i will offer feedback when time allows...

thank you again

darkly & deeply
duana

 

[duana]

dear PBW

sorry to dissappoint! i'm glad we kept you entertained at least for a while... i know how lonely 2:40 am can be!

thanks for sharing your story. i read it and voted for you. it was very well written, visually descriptive, romantic/erotic, and i really enjoyed your prosey style...

if only all my dreams could be like that one!

sweet!

duana

Darn... I was waiting for an good ole knock down drag out cat fight... and ya'll done made up already... geez. Just another male fantasy... what can I say... LOL. Besides being bored and totally awake at 2:40 in the AM.

- PBW

 

[P. B. Walker]

thanks for sharing your story. i read it and voted for you. it was very well written, visually descriptive, romantic/erotic, and i really enjoyed your prosey style...

if only all my dreams could be like that one!

sweet!

duana

duana,

Thanks for reading my story and especially for voting. I like getting those kind of votes. Now if I could just get like 20 more of them in the next day LOL... but alas.. I don't think I'll get them in time to be in the hunt for this months story contest.

Keep your eyes peeled for a couple more stories I've got coming out very soon (just after the new year).

Have a Happy New Year,

- PBW

 

[Laurel]

and, this is not a very friendly welcome. if i am to share, then what better way than to send in a submission with a link to my site so people can get to know me?

Hi duana,

Welcome to the site. We do allow members to put links to their non-commercial personal sites in their profiles. We even have a place for you to do so. However, we do not allow links within submissions, nor do we allow people to spam or post links for the purpose of advertisement on the bulletin board. We don't allow these things because of problems we've had in the past and problems we've seen on other boards. I hope you understand, and continue to participate.