I have a sci-fi story that has a man who has his wife cheat on him. He ends up with a medical condition, is shipped off for medical treatment, where he goes through an involuntary gender change. He never returns to the marraige, and the cheating wife dies. I want to include a sentence like:
She is going back to the United States, so she can piss on his ex-wife's grave.
I used "she" on the first two pronouns, because it is in the present, I used "his" on the last pronoun, because at the time of the relationship, the protagonist was a male.
Is this correct?
I have a second question about gasps of air while talking. Such as:
Sally sobbed, "I (hic)... don't (hic)... have (hic)... anywhere to go"!
Is this how it should be written?
Thank You, for your responses.
She is going back to the United States, so she can piss on his ex-wife's grave.
I used "she" on the first two pronouns, because it is in the present, I used "his" on the last pronoun, because at the time of the relationship, the protagonist was a male.
Is this correct?
I have a second question about gasps of air while talking. Such as:
Sally sobbed, "I (hic)... don't (hic)... have (hic)... anywhere to go"!
Is this how it should be written?
Thank You, for your responses.