Free Plot, Maybe

Otzchiim

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Over the years, I have spun stories out of things that have happened to me, things that have happened to people I knew, that have happened to neighbors of friends, places I have been that suggested possibilities, and in more than one case by imagining the middle of histories where I knew the beginning and the end.

Now I want to offer up for whoever can use it, if anyone can, a thing that happened to me before I ever tried writing a story and which I have never been able to use. The names are changed; all else is as I can recall it.

I was for a long time involved with a woman I will call Willie (for Wilhelmina, hence she used Willie) Greenwich. One year in that time Christmas Eve fell on Thursday and Christmas Day on Friday.

Her mother lived hundreds of miles away. (Her father was some years dead.) Her only brother was closer, but had converted and married into a sect that did not regard Christmas as festive. My older siblings were also some distance off. So we agreed to spend that weekend together to fight off loneliness.

I arrived at her apartment early on Thursday evening, with her present and a Cornish game hen for Christmas dinner.

Willie lived in the suburbs, just before the north end of the bus line in those days, and maybe a half-mile west of where it ran. Parking spaces were often scarce near her development, so the bus was more practical for a stay of more than an hour or so.

We talked, listened to music, and fooled around some, but I slept on her couch that night, since that was where the relationship stood at that point. (Feel free to change that detail, of course.)

On Christmas Day I walked down to a convenience store near her apartment and bought breakfast sandwiches for us. We talked that day, watched some television, exchanged presents, and fooled around some. That evening Willie cooked the Cornish game hen while I fixed a rice dish and vegetables. Then more of the same activities as before, and I slept on her couch again.

On Saturday she asked about going out somewhere, and I recalled that I had been invited to a party that night by a couple whom I knew. I had not said I would be there, since they were some distance from where I lived, but they were only six or seven miles from Willie’s apartment.

I called the couple and asked if I could still come, and bring Willie, whom they barely knew if at all. I was told that it would be no problem at all.

But I felt that under there circumstances, I should go home, bathe, change clothes, get something to eat, then return and go to the party in Willie’s car and presumably spend Saturday night on Willie’s couch.

Most of which I did, but when I knocked on Willie’s door at about 7:30 in the evening, I found her very mad for not being home when she called me to tell me not to come back. (I had no answering machine in those days.)

It seems that while I was gone, Bob Marsh, who had just broken up with his long-time girlfriend, had called to see what she was doing that night, and she told him about the party and decided to go with him instead of me. (I am not sure the couple having the party had ever heard of him; both Willie and I knew him from a quite different circle.)

So I set out to walk the six or seven miles to the party. As it happened, a mile along somebody I knew stopped and gave me a ride, and getting back home was easy.

It may have been foolish of me, but I go back together with Willie later, though I got disgusted with her drinking eventually.
 
Otzchiim - why don't you write it up yourself?

It's really difficult for other people to take on someone else's personal story.

:rose:

(Zoot? Bad boy!)
 
Well, I don't imagine the dude expects we're gonna run the result past him or anything. A free gift, such as it is. Inconclusive, of course.

The problem with life is, it lacks rehearsals. That's why it fails so often. That's where theater and the novel come in. Screenplays. Remember how many times, in the movies, or on stage, someone said exactly the right thing?
 
So, to summarize, the plot would be about Festivus, the Holiday invented on the Seinfeld show? Sorry. I'm easily confused.

No. Wait. It would be about the couch!

Now I've got it! It would be about incorporating the couch into the other Festivus rituals - perhaps some sort of activity invloving the aluminum pole, the couch, and the cat? Was there a cat? Damn! Now I have to go back up to the top and start over.

(slaps forehead) I'm such a ditz! It wasn't a cat, it was a cornish hen!
 
I'm sorry. I didn't mean to be a wise-ass. (Well, I did, really, but..) But I don't quite understand what the story is here. The fact that you were coming back to get Willy for the party and found out she was going with Bob Marsh instead? Why did she do that? Is there any rhyme or reason? Some irony or something? Or did she just like the cut of his jib?

And what kind of story would we write? A is sleeping with Willy, goes out to get ready for a party and comes back and she's with Bob Marsh and tells A to get lost? Then they end up at the same party?

I'm baffled.
 
Rocket Man

That's just too astonishing to believe!

You are my hero.

Please tell me this alt is just a front and you are really a hot young woman with a thing for old, expatriate men....

It could be love......



-KC
 
Rocket Man

Over the years, I have spun stories out of things that have happened to me, things that have happened to people I knew, that have happened to neighbors of friends, places I have been that suggested possibilities, and in more than one case by imagining the middle of histories where I knew the beginning and the end.

Now I want to offer up for whoever can use it, if anyone can, a thing that happened to me before I ever tried writing a story and which I have never been able to use. The names are changed; all else is as I can recall it.

I was for a long time involved with a woman I will call Willie (for Wilhelmina, hence she used Willie) Greenwich. One year in that time Christmas Eve fell on Thursday and Christmas Day on Friday.

Her mother lived hundreds of miles away. (Her father was some years dead.) Her only brother was closer, but had converted and married into a sect that did not regard Christmas as festive. My older siblings were also some distance off. So we agreed to spend that weekend together to fight off loneliness.

I arrived at her apartment early on Thursday evening, with her present and a Cornish game hen for Christmas dinner.

Willie lived in the suburbs, just before the north end of the bus line in those days, and maybe a half-mile west of where it ran. Parking spaces were often scarce near her development, so the bus was more practical for a stay of more than an hour or so.

We talked, listened to music, and fooled around some, but I slept on her couch that night, since that was where the relationship stood at that point. (Feel free to change that detail, of course.)

On Christmas Day I walked down to a convenience store near her apartment and bought breakfast sandwiches for us. We talked that day, watched some television, exchanged presents, and fooled around some. That evening Willie cooked the Cornish game hen while I fixed a rice dish and vegetables. Then more of the same activities as before, and I slept on her couch again.

On Saturday she asked about going out somewhere, and I recalled that I had been invited to a party that night by a couple whom I knew. I had not said I would be there, since they were some distance from where I lived, but they were only six or seven miles from Willie’s apartment.

I called the couple and asked if I could still come, and bring Willie, whom they barely knew if at all. I was told that it would be no problem at all.

But I felt that under there circumstances, I should go home, bathe, change clothes, get something to eat, then return and go to the party in Willie’s car and presumably spend Saturday night on Willie’s couch.

Most of which I did, but when I knocked on Willie’s door at about 7:30 in the evening, I found her very mad for not being home when she called me to tell me not to come back. (I had no answering machine in those days.)

It seems that while I was gone, Bob Marsh, who had just broken up with his long-time girlfriend, had called to see what she was doing that night, and she told him about the party and decided to go with him instead of me. (I am not sure the couple having the party had ever heard of him; both Willie and I knew him from a quite different circle.)

So I set out to walk the six or seven miles to the party. As it happened, a mile along somebody I knew stopped and gave me a ride, and getting back home was easy.

It may have been foolish of me, but I go back together with Willie later, though I got disgusted with her drinking eventually.

I think I wrote this story!!!! This is a copyright violation!!

I posted it in Loving Wives and I was one-bombed for being a wimp and not beating the shit outa Bob..... and for using a condom when masturbating about someday fucking Willie while she was passed out drunk. But everyone else loved the story.

Oh wait... No... in MY story.... getting home was NOT easy.

Never mind....

-KC
 
I don't understand why Otzchiim is giving this away. He has an excellent style and with a bit of filling, characterisation, plenty of dialogue and a point, any point, a conclusion then, anything, that is a very good story and an excellent read.
 
Rocket Man

I don't understand why Otzchiim is giving this away. He has an excellent style and with a bit of filling, characterisation, plenty of dialogue and a point, any point, a conclusion then, anything, that is a very good story and an excellent read.

It's just a hook.... try to use this plot and his lawyer will be at the door tomorrow demanding to do lunch with your lawyer!

-KC
 
It's just a hook.... try to use this plot and his lawyer will be at the door tomorrow demanding to do lunch with your lawyer!

-KC

In fact, I dare you.... try to use this plot!

Hmmmmmm... I think we may have a new and truly challenging contest idea here!!

Fuck Survivor and all that bashing H shit!

Make a story out of THIS plot!!!!

-KC
 
I don't understand why Otzchiim is giving this away. He has an excellent style and with a bit of filling, characterisation, plenty of dialogue and a point, any point, a conclusion then, anything, that is a very good story and an excellent read.

The reason I am giving it away is that after all these years (close to ten since I started posting stories, more like 20 since I began writing stories to try to sell to the men's magazines -- which no longer run them to speak of) I have never found a satisfying ending for a story from it.

I am tempted to think that this is because I don't like writing unpleasant stories, but actually several of mine are downers. I could certainly fill in details up to the point of knocking on the door, but nothing that makes dramatic sense comes after that.
 
Rocket Man

The reason I am giving it away is that after all these years (close to ten since I started posting stories, more like 20 since I began writing stories to try to sell to the men's magazines -- which no longer run them to speak of) I have never found a satisfying ending for a story from it.

I am tempted to think that this is because I don't like writing unpleasant stories, but actually several of mine are downers. I could certainly fill in details up to the point of knocking on the door, but nothing that makes dramatic sense comes after that.

Since no ones seems to want to take me up on the contest idea....

I would recommend you contact SlaveBoyKent..... I think he may be able to fill in the downer bits and certainly the dramatic sense for you. Please bring your own punctuation, however.

Good Luck,

-KC
 
Since no ones seems to want to take me up on the contest idea....

I would recommend you contact SlaveBoyKent..... I think he may be able to fill in the downer bits and certainly the dramatic sense for you. Please bring your own punctuation, however.

Good Luck,

-KC

You're fucking evil!
 
Since no ones seems to want to take me up on the contest idea....

I would recommend you contact SlaveBoyKent..... I think he may be able to fill in the downer bits and certainly the dramatic sense for you. Please bring your own punctuation, however.

Good Luck,

-KC
It could be the beginning of a really great friendship.
 
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