Format For A Sequel - Need Opinions

[EricasDreams]

Hi,

I am looking for opinions on formatting a sequel. I have posted three episodic series of stories over the past few years. My first story was “Dr. Erica Beaumar Surrenders”, which I am happy to say has been a success! I have given birth to two children in the past 2.5 years, which has slowed my writing but not my imagination. I am now looking to write additional chapters. I think “Dr. Erica” should go first since she has had only one chapter so far, while the other two series each have two chapters. I have something a little unique in mind, but I’m not sure of it.

Regarding the existing “Dr. Erica” chapter, it describes a 35 year-old white female physician who is overcome with lust for her 20 year-old black patient, Ben, in the course of administering his physical exam. She tries to remain professional, but surrenders and ends up impregnated right there in the examination room! At the end of the story it is made clear the two continue their sexual relationship, with Erica being fully aware and supportive of the fact that the beautiful young stud that conquered her enjoys numerous attractive lovers.

And so, I plan to write a sequel chapter called “Dr. Erica Beaumar Corrupts”. My idea is to have Erica and Ben jointly seduce an 18 year-old female friend of Erica’s family. The result will be a threesome, but here is the plan: I want the episode to be from the point-of-view of the young acquaintance. I want to describe the young girl’s impressions of Erica, and her feelings as she is exposed for the first time to sapphic and interracial passion. Would this be acceptable? Or should episodes in a series be from the same perspective? Opinions would be greatly appreciated. Thanks!

-EvH

 

[ElectricBlue]

Follow your muse - if you think different perspectives will tell your story best, then write them. There's absolutely no rule that says a story cycle has to have the same point of view.

My only advice would be to give your readers a good long run with each pov, and make it very clear when you change. There's nothing worse than head-hopping paragraph by paragraph - long scenes with a single perspective solves that problem.

The other alternative is to write a close third person narrator - you can take whichever pov you choose.

 

[SimonDoom]

I see nothing wrong with writing a subsequent chapter from a different perspective about the same person. You wrote the first installment from the first person point of view, as told by Erica, so I assume you would tell the next chapter in the first person point of view from the young acquaintance's perspective. There's nothing wrong with this. It could be a very interesting and erotic way to tell the story. It could offer another perspective on what makes Erica an attractive, sexy woman.

For the sake of clarity, and to be consistent with your first chapter, keep the POV consistent throughout the chapter. Don't shift to other POVs until you get to the next chapter.

Good luck.

 

[ajmoor]

Personally, if I'm writing a series, I prefer to plan the whole thing upfront so I know where it is going, but I know not everyone does that. Something that helps me is to sit down with a notebook and a pen and see what I come up with doing a free writing exercise. This may be helpful for you, too, as you plan your next installment.

Hi,

I am looking for opinions on formatting a sequel. I have posted three episodic series of stories over the past few years. My first story was “Dr. Erica Beaumar Surrenders”, which I am happy to say has been a success! I have given birth to two children in the past 2.5 years, which has slowed my writing but not my imagination. I am now looking to write additional chapters. I think “Dr. Erica” should go first since she has had only one chapter so far, while the other two series each have two chapters. I have something a little unique in mind, but I’m not sure of it.

Regarding the existing “Dr. Erica” chapter, it describes a 35 year-old white female physician who is overcome with lust for her 20 year-old black patient, Ben, in the course of administering his physical exam. She tries to remain professional, but surrenders and ends up impregnated right there in the examination room! At the end of the story it is made clear the two continue their sexual relationship, with Erica being fully aware and supportive of the fact that the beautiful young stud that conquered her enjoys numerous attractive lovers.

And so, I plan to write a sequel chapter called “Dr. Erica Beaumar Corrupts”. My idea is to have Erica and Ben jointly seduce an 18 year-old female friend of Erica’s family. The result will be a threesome, but here is the plan: I want the episode to be from the point-of-view of the young acquaintance. I want to describe the young girl’s impressions of Erica, and her feelings as she is exposed for the first time to sapphic and interracial passion. Would this be acceptable? Or should episodes in a series be from the same perspective? Opinions would be greatly appreciated. Thanks!

-EvH

 

[blozo]

For the sake of clarity, and to be consistent with your first chapter, keep the POV consistent throughout the chapter. Don't shift to other POVs until you get to the next chapter.

I agree. My series "The Aunts" changes POV three times, and it's a little bit awkward, especially the one written from the woman's point of view.

You know by now what you do best, stick with it, especially if the premise of the series is already established.

 

[MelissaBaby]

In my series, Mary and Alvin, I have weaved back and forth between the POVs of the two protagonists within each chapter. Alternating perspectives from chapter to chapter? That's a piece of cake.

Good luck with it.

 

[MelissaBaby]

The other alternative is to write a close third person narrator - you can take whichever pov you choose.

If the OP indicated they were using first person, I missed that.

Edit- OK, I see that Simon reported that they did.

 

[yukonnights]

...I want the episode to be from the point-of-view of the young acquaintance. I want to describe the young girl’s impressions of Erica, and her feelings as she is exposed for the first time to sapphic and interracial passion. Would this be acceptable? Or should episodes in a series be from the same perspective? Opinions would be greatly appreciated. Thanks!

I took a look at your original 'Dr. Erica Beaumar Surrenders' to get a sense of what part one was like. Mostly, I wanted to see how long it was—at two Lit screens I think it's just about the perfect length to do what you propose for your sequel.

It's not at all unusual to change the pov inside the same story. It's been made adequately clear that to do it within the same body of text, one needs to use some device to keep the characters scenes separate. Typically a clear chapter break, and sometimes those chapter include headers that indicate the current pov character.

But in your proposal, it is my impression that you would write the entire sequel in the pov of the new character. This would be a really interesting move in my opinion, as it freshens the story with a whole new take on the other two existing characters.

 

[EricasDreams]

Thank you so much for all the input! Yes, I will keep it simple with just the POV of the young acquaintance being presented in Ch 2. And what a view she will have! It’s going to be quite the eye-opener for the young beauty, among other things...

-EvH

 

[PennameWombat]

I see nothing wrong with writing a subsequent chapter from a different perspective about the same person. You wrote the first installment from the first person point of view, as told by Erica, so I assume you would tell the next chapter in the first person point of view from the young acquaintance's perspective. There's nothing wrong with this. It could be a very interesting and erotic way to tell the story. It could offer another perspective on what makes Erica an attractive, sexy woman.

For the sake of clarity, and to be consistent with your first chapter, keep the POV consistent throughout the chapter. Don't shift to other POVs until you get to the next chapter.

Good luck.

I heartily endorse this guidance. I like the idea that with a different PoV you can show positive and negative aspects of some character that are not seen via a different person's PoV. People don't always see a negative about themselves or someone else (like their lover), or it might not affect them like it does another character.

But as advised, use clear breaks. Different chapters for different PoVs.

 

[Hypoxia]

I like the idea that with a different PoV you can show positive and negative aspects of some character that are not seen via a different person's PoV.
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But as advised, use clear breaks. Different chapters for different PoVs.

Every chapter in my successful 18-part series STANLEY STEAMER is told from one or two POVs, 18 narrators in all, none of them the MC. Some overlap just a little time-wise but it's not Roshomon, not distinct eyes giving their views of the same events. One tells their tale; the next tells what happens next; and on and on. Same with my 3-part series A TASTE OF LEMONADE, each chapter a new POV in sequence.

These are strokers -- not much character 'development' or 'reveal', just sex from various angles. Someday I may try the multiple-unreliable-narrators trick with each chapter a new POV contradicting the others. That'll be fun. And yes, I ensure that each POV is distinct and identified. Don't confuse the readers more than necessary.