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Unbridled_Passion

Unbridled_Passion

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I would like to hear any expressions of love without actually using the word love. I am trying to write something for a very special person. Any and all comments welcome!
 
you make my heart race

my soul soars

my knees weak

I adore you



What's wrong with using the word "LOVE". It's not like a word can be cliche but I can guarantee most of the other expressions that avoid using LOVE are.


I like writing love poems.

me in the archives said:
You

You are a wonder spoke softly,
lest the angels hear and steal you away,
to make heaven a better place.

You are a dream slept sweetly,
for the pain of living will not touch us,
such beauty is not the day's to spoil.

You are a melody sung early,
a note within the morning,
a song for birds to trill.

You soar them through the sky.

You are my heart heard beating,
sustaining me when you're not near,
a strength, a wonder spoke softly.

For My Love, (on his birthday)

Let me celebrate my knowing
all those small delights,
that bring a smile
up from the depths
and let a laugh bubble
over my heart,
when I hear it from your lips.

We have made a journey
few are blessed to take,
without a map to point
the way or even crumbs
upon the path, but darling
we have blazed a trail and set
markers where we should stop again.

See the road as it wends
through the dappled glen,
mysteries await around
each corner and I am eager to see.
Let's travel through another year,
breathless and willing
to find our joys together.

It is overwhelming
to have this in my soul
to love each waking moment
that I can call you mine.
I want to make a gift
of my very essence
that you can carry with you.

It is a light, lit to show you
the way to my heart,
a song, sung on days when music
becomes a prayer;
a verse of love and gratitude,
a poem, from my heart,
a love to wrap around you.

I give you this and more.

Always.

The Sculpture

He searches for each subtle clue
of what his art will be.
A flaw in fabric, a knot in wood
a crack inside the stone
He sees all this and then he looks
deeper for a hint
Of golden fleck, inside the granite,
or a swirl of grain, in wood.

Expose the golden heart cast,
there, within the bronze.
Pound strength into this molten steel
forged from iron's rust.
The artisan makes me his craft
and creates Pygmalion's form,
My lover clothed in workingman's skin
shapes this golem's heart.

To have his touch on my formless soul,
moulded in his hands
And feel as his breath on my marble lips
warms them for his kiss,
Only my craftsman loves me enough
to humanize this mud.
This exquisite life can only be lived
as a product of his mind.​
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you are everything...

and everything is you
(If they don't like soul music maybe they won't know you stole it.) Good Luck. :heart:
 
You are the book I read
in bed each night. Asleep,
the words of which I dream.

And when I wake next day
my primer of those lovely words
that I, unguarded, seek.
 
Painting Night

Eyes closed, new memories
fill three-quarters of moon
lit soft as luminaria, almost
insubstantial but enough
to watch hair slip, pressing cheek

or dropping

falling

falling

brushing

a shoulder, forearm, hip.

This is the fate of whispering
lips close and laughing loony,
the art of painting night

point to compass point, roadways
flower bordered, waterways speak,
star fields yield to sun. This is a song

This fate of breath held long,
then breathed, then shared--

the dancing with no net,
the tightrope walking air.​
 
To just replace a word with another or a metahor won't make must of a difference. Try to focus on that special someone you talk about and distill the essence of what it is that makes you love.

I could serve you metaphors, but unless it's one that hits home in the context of your situation and person, it's not gonna help.

Here's one I wrote. it works when it's about the girl it's about, but would not be the same if it was about someone else.

---------------------------

High

It's well enough to watch you fly,

swoop a script across
my vision, your signature in
secret ink brought forth with
deep blue kisses fetched
from stratosphere.

Can you see it? Black dots dancing
on cyan paper. They go high today,
so high.

You're too a phantom particle,
evading eyes up there.

But I'm not. Here,
feel my hand in yours,
always right beside you.

Not really,
your feet never reach all the way down,
and your lungs breathe lighter air
wherever you are, somewhere up there.

But I don't mind,
tethered to gravity,
I rest on rock, release you to soar.
I have no need for another high,

it's well enough to watch you fly.

-----------------------------
 
Thanks!

these poems and suggestions are really great! I know that using the word 'love' is not cliche, it just doesn't seem like a strong enough word to let him know how I feel. Anyone else feel free to jump in!
 
Unbridled_Passion said:
these poems and suggestions are really great! I know that using the word 'love' is not cliche, it just doesn't seem like a strong enough word to let him know how I feel. Anyone else feel free to jump in!
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a tornado of emotions
in a single touch
warmly embraced
with a single look...

...is love justifiably described with one word? (~_*)
 
Tzara said:
You are the book I read
in bed each night. Asleep,
the words of which I dream.

And when I wake next day
my primer of those lovely words
that I, unguarded, seek.
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ahem!!

someone, by the name of TZARA, says he writes with no emotion..tsk, tsk

this is beautiful, T. beautiful

:rose:


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Tzara said:
You are the book I read
in bed each night. Asleep,
the words of which I dream.

And when I wake next day
my primer of those lovely words
that I, unguarded, seek.
Click to expand...

This is absolutely gorgeous. I had to read it over four or five times and I'll undoubtedly go over it a few more times before moving on. Great work.
 
My Erotic Trail said:
a tornado of emotions
in a single touch
warmly embraced
with a single look...

...is love justifiably described with one word? (~_*)
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not necessarily one word...but I am feeling this one out. I have a few ideas playing around in my head...nothing on paper yet, but soon I hope.
:heart:
 
Unbridled_Passion said:
not necessarily one word...but I am feeling this one out. I have a few ideas playing around in my head...nothing on paper yet, but soon I hope.
:heart:
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let me see (o_o) .....
 
Okay, here is what I finally came up with. I hope it touches your heart the way you have touched mine:

if you counted all of the stars in the Heavens
and multiplied them by two
it wouldn't be a drop in the bucket
compared to how I feel for you

two beautiful steel-blue eyes
reveal the window to your soul
one look is all it takes to know
your love can make me whole

I know you will always be there
for the happiness and to dry my tears
as memories are created
throughout the coming years

meeting you was the most wonderful thing
that has happened in my life
and the best day I will ever have
will be the day I become your wife

I LOVE YOU BABY!:heart::heart::heart:
 
Unbridled_Passion said:
Okay, here is what I finally came up with. I hope it touches your heart the way you have touched mine:

if you counted all of the stars in the Heavens
and multiplied them by two
it wouldn't be a drop in the bucket
compared to how I feel for you

two beautiful steel-blue eyes
reveal the window to your soul
one look is all it takes to know
your love can make me whole

I know you will always be there
for the happiness and to dry my tears
as memories are created
throughout the coming years

meeting you was the most wonderful thing
that has happened in my life
and the best day I will ever have
will be the day I become your wife

I LOVE YOU BABY!:heart::heart::heart:
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<shy grin...

'a very touching write'
 
Tzara said:
You are the book I read
in bed each night. Asleep,
the words of which I dream.

And when I wake next day
my primer of those lovely words
that I, unguarded, seek.
Click to expand...

you are the book I read
in braille
low fingers walk the talk
when eyes fail
 
love day
is on hump day
this year

I got the smokin' cherry
she recieved the 'ICE'

chocolate on bare skin
cards that made us grin
teddy bear-hugs
in a playful way

this valentine's day
 
yeah... I did it again!

Unbridled_Passion said:
love day
is on hump day
this year

I got the smokin' cherry
she recieved the 'ICE'

chocolate on bare skin
cards that made us grin
teddy bear-hugs
in a playful way

this valentine's day
Click to expand...


settin' fire to ... 'Montecristo' <bigrin (~_*)
 
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