First time writer seeks feedback please

[babyboo]

I'm a first time writer on Literotica and would love for people to check out my story and vote on it just so I can get some feedback and see where I can improve. My story is called "Old Friends & New Lovers" and can be found in the "Lesbian Sex" category. It's doing well so far with an average rating of 4.61 but I would still appreciate votes and any feedback people have to offer since this is my first attempt. Thank you all for your time and if you decide to read my story...enjoy!

 

[JUDO]

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Hey Boo -

Here's your listing:

"Old Friends & New Lovers"
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=19622

I already emailed you. For a first-timer, it's awesome and the girl's only submission so far.

You know I liked it, boo. Please, encore.


- Judo

 

[Nudemodel]

Altogether good story. Well written, sexy, and a pleasant read.