I posted my first story a few days ago, would love some feedback...
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=149694
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=149694
first time story submission/incest
- Thread starter iluv2fuk
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cantdog
Waybac machine
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A few days! All kinds of public comments, dude. You got more feedback on this than most of us ever get. You're all set.
cantdog
ps I did read it; it's rather sad and flat. You need to add some motion, some feeling, some emotion. Some of your readers reacted very strongly to the content, the fantasy, but the writing needs some sensitivity and heat.
Gang bang sex can be an amazing feeling. I know a woman, or knew her, who did it three times and found a lot to like. But she was conscious.
cantdog
ps I did read it; it's rather sad and flat. You need to add some motion, some feeling, some emotion. Some of your readers reacted very strongly to the content, the fantasy, but the writing needs some sensitivity and heat.
Gang bang sex can be an amazing feeling. I know a woman, or knew her, who did it three times and found a lot to like. But she was conscious.
