First submission - feedback please

Hmm... not bad

The story was a good little "quick and dirty". The sex was pretty arousing and well described and the narrative was pretty decent as well. So, good work there.

I would have liked a little buildup and background to them and maybe some more story in it (apart from the sex), but not bad for your first try.

Normally I would give it 3/5 but given it is your first story I am giving it 4/5. Keep writing.
 
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