First Story

[simonlilith]

Hi, everyone. My first story was just put up:

Island of Frankenstein - Ch.1 (Erotic Horror)

http://www.literotica.com/s/island-of-frankenstein-ch-01

This is an over the top sendup of the old Universal and Hammer Frankenstein movies with a healthy dose of Rocky Horror.

A lot of B&D, mind control, and transformation. If people enjoy it, I hope to make it a long running serial.

I welcome any and all comments.

Simon

 

[walkerlong]

You do a good job setting a dark and ominous tone. It seems like you have a lot of ideas to work with and that's great. For me, however, the story jumped around a bit too much. I'm a big advocate of a consistent point of view. A new chapter is a good place for those big scene switches.

 

[simonlilith]

You do a good job setting a dark and ominous tone. It seems like you have a lot of ideas to work with and that's great. For me, however, the story jumped around a bit too much. I'm a big advocate of a consistent point of view. A new chapter is a good place for those big scene switches.

Thanks for the tips, Walker!

Simon