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Jenny_Jackson
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It depends on several thing *
Are you a total unknown?
What kind of story is it?
What day did it come out?
Is there a contest running?
And other things.
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it's incest; it'll get read by zillions. 
Jenny_Jackson
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I actually found the story rather confused on a couple of levels. First, a Christmas story in September? That's a bad start. People don't want to think about Christmas until after Halloween.
Your first paragraph reads:
First of all, who the hell is WE?? You have to tell us. Then you said "...these ones are like second cousins..." These ones? And they are second couses on not. Which are they? You should know. They aren't "LIKE" some cousin. They are or they are not. You need to be logical and assume we don't know what the fuck you are talking about - we don't.
Then your third paragraph begins...
VERB Confustion!!
From that point the story doesn't reall improve much.
Sir, it is my humble opinion that you write the way you speak. Get an editor. Logic and grammar are your friends here.
Your first paragraph reads:
First of all, who the hell is WE?? You have to tell us. Then you said "...these ones are like second cousins..." These ones?
And they are second couses on not. Which are they? You should know. They aren't "LIKE" some cousin. They are or they are not. You need to be logical and assume we don't know what the fuck you are talking about - we don't.Then your third paragraph begins...
VERB Confustion!!
From that point the story doesn't reall improve much.
Sir, it is my humble opinion that you write the way you speak. Get an editor. Logic and grammar are your friends here.
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Good morning Geronimo_A. Long time
heya.
i've been around. just prolly not in the same time-zones and forums as yerself.
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Depends on your definition of "a few people".
Let's talk concrete numbers for a second. The last major story I posted was "The First 90 Days". It's 16 chapters long, and about as many pages as the final Harry Potter novel. My total readership for the story was around 50,000... But, remember, if one person reads the story through, that counts as 16 views. So the truth is that I only had about 3,000 people read it total.
You've probably got me beat.
Why? Because, as mentioned, you posted in the Incest category, which is the 2nd-biggest category on the site (after plain ol' Erotic Couplings), whereas I posted to Novels & Novellas which gets practically no readership. Also, I'm not in it for a quick erection; I write stories that people complain about. "90 Days" was one; in another, I set up a situation with a Nice Guy pining for a Nice Girl who was involved with a Jerk. ...And then no happy ending, just the Nice Guy pining away in anguished silence. Boy, the tantrums about that one. So I shoot myself in the foot, and I pay the price.
No offense intended, but, you're shooting yourself in the foot too. Look at Jenny's comments about your prose. Now, I personally didn't find the language too distracting: I see the shifts as being part of your narrator's voice. It works, and that's all that matters in fiction, so I can't in good conscience say that you did it wrong. (I would, though, say that you could've done it more right, and encourage you to learn to do it properly, so that you can craft these things consciously instead of by happy accident.) Nonetheless, her comments are instructive. She was bucked off your text because it was too jumpy. How many others did you lose that way? And are you okay with that?
Furthermore, because you posted in Incest/Taboo, you foot-shot in another way: the standards there are pretty high. It's not enough to be adequate there, or even good; you have to be excellent. Why? Because there's so much there! The Reader can afford to be picky, and ignore a fledgling writer--I mean, you're not bad by any means; young, and still finding your way, but you've a lot of potential. But there's plenty of available material by experienced writers instead, people who already know what you're still learning, and if The Reader wants to read those stories instead, well, he can. True, those writers may have a lot more experience than you, and are probably a fair bit older. True, it's not fair that you're being judgd according to that. But that is, unfortunately, the way life works.
Ultimately, though, if you're really in this to rack up high numbers and lots of views, forget it. Go home. You won't win. (I say this as one of those "older, more experienced" writers--I got my first fanfic accepted by a moderated fiction board back in '99.) Fiction, even erotic fiction, isn't something you do for the popularity. It's something you do because you love it. And if the public doesn't get you, then you shake your head at how stupid they are--while simultaneously listening to their comments about what you could do better next time--and then try again. You're not in this to be loved. You're in this to tell a story. The rest will follow in its own due time.
Let's talk concrete numbers for a second. The last major story I posted was "The First 90 Days". It's 16 chapters long, and about as many pages as the final Harry Potter novel. My total readership for the story was around 50,000... But, remember, if one person reads the story through, that counts as 16 views. So the truth is that I only had about 3,000 people read it total.
You've probably got me beat.
Why? Because, as mentioned, you posted in the Incest category, which is the 2nd-biggest category on the site (after plain ol' Erotic Couplings), whereas I posted to Novels & Novellas which gets practically no readership. Also, I'm not in it for a quick erection; I write stories that people complain about. "90 Days" was one; in another, I set up a situation with a Nice Guy pining for a Nice Girl who was involved with a Jerk. ...And then no happy ending, just the Nice Guy pining away in anguished silence. Boy, the tantrums about that one. So I shoot myself in the foot, and I pay the price.
No offense intended, but, you're shooting yourself in the foot too. Look at Jenny's comments about your prose. Now, I personally didn't find the language too distracting: I see the shifts as being part of your narrator's voice. It works, and that's all that matters in fiction, so I can't in good conscience say that you did it wrong. (I would, though, say that you could've done it more right, and encourage you to learn to do it properly, so that you can craft these things consciously instead of by happy accident.) Nonetheless, her comments are instructive. She was bucked off your text because it was too jumpy. How many others did you lose that way? And are you okay with that?
Furthermore, because you posted in Incest/Taboo, you foot-shot in another way: the standards there are pretty high. It's not enough to be adequate there, or even good; you have to be excellent. Why? Because there's so much there! The Reader can afford to be picky, and ignore a fledgling writer--I mean, you're not bad by any means; young, and still finding your way, but you've a lot of potential. But there's plenty of available material by experienced writers instead, people who already know what you're still learning, and if The Reader wants to read those stories instead, well, he can. True, those writers may have a lot more experience than you, and are probably a fair bit older. True, it's not fair that you're being judgd according to that. But that is, unfortunately, the way life works.
Ultimately, though, if you're really in this to rack up high numbers and lots of views, forget it. Go home. You won't win. (I say this as one of those "older, more experienced" writers--I got my first fanfic accepted by a moderated fiction board back in '99.) Fiction, even erotic fiction, isn't something you do for the popularity. It's something you do because you love it. And if the public doesn't get you, then you shake your head at how stupid they are--while simultaneously listening to their comments about what you could do better next time--and then try again. You're not in this to be loved. You're in this to tell a story. The rest will follow in its own due time.
geronimo_appleby
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i dunno. but here's a stat from one of mine: 535 votes, 290439 views (note: i said views and not reads cos i have no idea how many of those hits was just a browse, etc.
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