First story

[Saucy_Sage]

love to know what people think of the first chapter of my first story.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=384400

I've gotten a nice comment and some nice e-mails (although apparently it's too short, lol).

 

[Brett315]

Nice

Very nice, and I usually don't like the incest conversations. But, very nice.

 

[markelly]

Very Good..

I liked it, I had also read the comments passed and couldn't agree more with them. But to me you left the story.... Hanging

 

[ericahope]

I look forward to the rest of the story. I like your writing style.

 

[fatang]

I look forward to the rest of the story. I like your writing style.

I agree with Erica...nice writing style. Builds nicely, and very erotic.Nice start...looking forward to the rest!

(I have my own 'first story' as well, and would love any feedback you may have)

 

[JackLuis]

Hints of incest?

love to know what people think of the first chapter of my first story.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=384400

I've gotten a nice comment and some nice e-mails (although apparently it's too short, lol).

___________________________________
I asked myself, "Where is this going?"
She answered, "Where I want it to go, Lover."

Good one so far.
Jack

 

[ellieFANT]

v good!