First Story

[e_wr1ter]

Hey, i'm new and my first story was accepted today, Yey!
As its the first time i have written any story, let alone an erotic one, i just thought i would ask for all of your opinions and feedback. With some helpful comments hopefully it will help me to write better stories.
I think there is a link in my sig, but i'm not sure if i did that right..
Anyway, thanks to anyone who comments on it.

 

[*Catbabe*]

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=130235

There's your link.

 

[My Erotic Tail]

Electric Touch~

Loved the idea...and had great story line.
All the makings for a part two also.
Bit graphic for me but I see a lot of that.
I like the flow of it, was an easy read so
I was able to stay into it. Keep up the work
and a little hepler for me...feedback is great.
But the enjoyment of writing the story is the key.
smiles at your tale....

 

[Kirk482002]

A very good first effort.

I've been kicking around the idea of writing a mind control story and it followed your storyline to a tee. Well, 'The early bird gets the worm'. The story worked for me because I believed I was there with you as the story unfolded. Although the story was predictable, it was fun. Write part 2.