First story!

[katalynn]

This is the first I ever wrote, and is the first one I have posted.

Let me know whatcha all think, and maybe even improve it some, (which I know there could always be some improvements.)
Thanx.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=89415[/URL]

 

[Guest]

Superb!

 

[Wicked-N-Erotic]

Congrats on your first story
I don't usually read non-human, however, for the sake of feedback I read the entire piece. It really didn't read as a non-human piece to me after I got past the beginning, it could have just been two lovers having sex. However, there were several typo's, misspellings, run-on sentences and over use of words.
The general idea was interesting and well laid out. With editing and proofreading it would be much easier to read.

In all, nice work and good luck with future pieces. It gets so much easier after the first one

Wicked

 

[dr_mabeuse]

You really need to proofread. Running spellcheck isn't good enough.

"Your" is the possessive form of "you".

"You're" is a contraction of "You are".


---dr.M.

 

[CrownJoolz]

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