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Teneskel
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Hello, new here. I just wrote my first erotic story, and would appreciate some feedback.
Angel Lake
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=436413
Deciding to write this was a very spur of the moment thing. I was basically horny and browsing erotic stories around the web, which I do from time to time, and was frustrated at not being able to find one that really got me going. Being an amateur writer myself, I thought, "Why not?". lol
It's a fairly normal friend's-hot-mom kind of story. I get off on visual, sensory aspects, so a lot of my focus goes towards what things looked like, felt like, etc. I hope my hook snags any wandering, horny guys out there. I'm a fan of big tits, though smaller ones are fine, so my heroine is well endowed, and generally as hot as you could imagine. It's fantasy, so I just let her be insanely yummy. I try to leave ages and the protagonists appearances vague so the reader can better substitute himself, though I don't know how well I do that. I really don't know how it's going to hit people. It's catered towards males, but do the ladies like it too?
Any feedback at all is appreciated. I'm always curious what people think and what I can learn from their advice.
Thanks, Teneskel.
Angel Lake
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=436413
Deciding to write this was a very spur of the moment thing. I was basically horny and browsing erotic stories around the web, which I do from time to time, and was frustrated at not being able to find one that really got me going. Being an amateur writer myself, I thought, "Why not?". lol
It's a fairly normal friend's-hot-mom kind of story. I get off on visual, sensory aspects, so a lot of my focus goes towards what things looked like, felt like, etc. I hope my hook snags any wandering, horny guys out there. I'm a fan of big tits, though smaller ones are fine, so my heroine is well endowed, and generally as hot as you could imagine. It's fantasy, so I just let her be insanely yummy. I try to leave ages and the protagonists appearances vague so the reader can better substitute himself, though I don't know how well I do that. I really don't know how it's going to hit people. It's catered towards males, but do the ladies like it too?
Any feedback at all is appreciated. I'm always curious what people think and what I can learn from their advice.
Thanks, Teneskel.
