First Story Submitted...feedback, maybe?

[DiablaRaven]

Just hoping for a bit of feedback on my story, and maybe some helpful hints for my next one (a sequel to the first, natch).

So far in the general email feedback I've gotten good reviews, but only one real suggestion critique which told me I needed to add things in like penis size (which I find distracting from story flow, so I probably won't heed that one). But I'd love to hear what some of my fellow authors might suggest! Thanks in advance for reading.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=42074

 

[CarolineOh]

I've had similar criticism, and I think that you have to decide, as the author, how much you want to compromise your vision of the story with satisfing the particular desires of some readers.
The first story I posted in the Interacial Love category, I got several letters roundly criticizing me because I didn't use the phrase "big black cock" enough. Obviously, those particular words gave a charge to some readers, but I don't think that is worth messing up the flow of your words for.