First story (Ratings without feedback)

[Effera]

My story is being rated but not with the feedback I had hoped. I am inexperienced in this forum and am more interested in hearing about my style than in how it made the reader feel.

I am deffinately after the wet, hard...Yeah, you get it. But I really want to know about my style and how the story reads.

All input is appreciated

Thank you.

Story link:

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=388656

 

[JackLuis]

My story is being rated but not with the feedback I had hoped. I am inexperienced in this forum and am more interested in hearing about my style than in how it made the reader feel.

I am deffinately after the wet, hard...Yeah, you get it. But I really want to know about my style and how the story reads.

All input is appreciated

Thank you.

Story link:

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=388656

Effera Nice story.

SHort and sweet. all sex, no shit and well written.
The only thing is, Did she really stop masterbating and not climax formthe dissapointment of not being able to fulfill her fantasy?

 

[Effera]

She had already climaxed...alot, exhaustion and frustration made her quit. I'm glad you enjoyed. One of my issues is exactly what you pointed out. I want to get to the grit without the flowering of the sexual acts...but it leaves my stories short.

Many thanks for the feeback!

 

[chicacd75]

I actually liked it a lot, I really enjoyed the way you teased with the guys cocks touching each other, and towards then end having the cum shoot onto the other guys cock, it spoke to more than just a straight forward 3some in the shower, almost as if you were hinting at something more, a hidden desire within, very enjoyable.

 

[Effera]

Hinting is part of the tease. Teasing is a big portion of my stories. I'm glad you noticed that and enjoyed it!


Thanks for the feedback

 

[Hisscarlett]

I enjoyed reading your story and like your style. I think most would tell you that feedback can be sporadic, if at all.

I look forward to reading more of your work.