First story published, lookin for feedback

[furiousdistribution]

First of many, I suspect! Have had a hard time finding any beta readers/editors, so I thought I'd just start posting and see what happens haha. It's a gay male corruption story. Other stories will be other genres.

EDIT:
Please be aware that "gay male corruption story" in this case means that it is a story of non-consensual sexual acts (with the needle hovering somewhere close to, but not on, 'reluctance') wherein magic is used to alter the subject of corruption into wanting something they wouldn't prior to the corruption. Only give it a read if any of these things interest you.

https://literotica.com/s/depraved-corruption-aching-march

Appreciate any feedback on it! Positive, negative, good bad indifferent. Well, not indifferent, probably. I don't know what I can do with indifferent.

I forgot to put an author's note at the beginning about content, so the editor had to hahaha. Whoops.

(Ugh, I already found an error just looking at it.)

Anywho, appreciate any looks, thanks!

 

[JackBellend41]

I really enjoyed your story. Great fun. Gay is not usually my thing but you made it very interesting with the fantasy aspect. Hope to see more.
Jack

 

[furiousdistribution]

Glad to hear it!
I will be posting more, and the rest will have a variety of couplings. This one is actually the only one that has exclusively gay, but it was the most "self-contained" and I'm still trying to figure out how to break up the other stories.