Now I'm biting my nails, hoping people read it, hoping they don't ... so hard when you send your babies out into the big bad world!
http://www.literotica.com/s/her-left-arm
http://www.literotica.com/s/her-left-arm
First story posted ...
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I read enough of your story to form an idea of your skill set. I say this because the category is low on my list of stuff that floats my boat. So understand that BDSM doesnt do it for me 99.99% of the time. The Marquis de Sade dont thrill me.
So here you are: Your tale is coherent and cohesive and you got the punctuation and spelling under control. The rest is my personal druthers: Get rid of the auxillary verbs and adverbs, they shout to the world, I CUT CORNERS! Rather than say WAS KNEELING say KNELT.
And dont worry about your babies.
LaRascasse
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I read it and my main question is - are you sure it's in the right category?
If it's a roleplay, then I appear to have missed the punchline. Otherwise, it should be in nonhuman/scifi.
I was wondering the same thing. Should it? It is a D/s story, but it also takes place in a different sci-fi type world. I wasn't sure which category to put it in. I originally conceived it as a possible graphic novel ... but the sci-fi world takes a back seat for the D/s relationship ...
Should I change categories? Is that possible?
