Kikori
Burning My Dread
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- Oct 15, 2008
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The only huge error I noticed I made was a copy-paste error between the two characters chatting back and forth online; instead of showing with a line break between each message, it's one jumbled paragraph. :\
That aside... How much more do I need to improve?
The only huge error I noticed I made was a copy-paste error between the two characters chatting back and forth online; instead of showing with a line break between each message, it's one jumbled paragraph. :\
That aside... How much more do I need to improve?
