Hey there!
I just took a stab at my first erotic story and had it accepted. So I was hoping for maybe some feed back.
Story can be found here: http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=419193
As I said in the title, it is taboo. So hopefully if that offends you, you aren't even reading this post!
Anyway, a couple comments I have gotten on it is that its "too drawn out," "need a proof reader," and "(in my own words) lack of safe sex to an extent."
I should have put a disclaimer so I will do so now here for all of you:
**Disclaimer** While there could be elements in this story that do not represent safe sexual behavior, I would ALWAYS advocate safe sex in a real environment. This is a story and fiction after all.
Well anyway with that being out of the way, the other comments could be true and I will take them to heart. Too bad I have pretty much finished chapter 2 if the "long drawn out" is true. Always time for trimming I guess though.
Anyway, appreciate any honest feedback! I'll take it all in! Thanks in advance!
I just took a stab at my first erotic story and had it accepted. So I was hoping for maybe some feed back.
Story can be found here: http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=419193
As I said in the title, it is taboo. So hopefully if that offends you, you aren't even reading this post!
Anyway, a couple comments I have gotten on it is that its "too drawn out," "need a proof reader," and "(in my own words) lack of safe sex to an extent."
I should have put a disclaimer so I will do so now here for all of you:
**Disclaimer** While there could be elements in this story that do not represent safe sexual behavior, I would ALWAYS advocate safe sex in a real environment. This is a story and fiction after all.
Well anyway with that being out of the way, the other comments could be true and I will take them to heart. Too bad I have pretty much finished chapter 2 if the "long drawn out" is true. Always time for trimming I guess though.
Anyway, appreciate any honest feedback! I'll take it all in! Thanks in advance!
