First story ever. Is it good?

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Smk666

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This is my first time writing a short sex story. Not sure if it's any good. Could you guys let me know, I could possibly make more if this one is decent. :) thank you.

One night while picking up a movie at the local blockbuster, I stumbled upon the most handsome man I've ever saw in my life. His hair dark brown, eyes were green, and his skin tan. I thought I was in love. I wasn't paying any attention when I ran right into a rack of CDs, and I fell on my ass. Everyone looked over, and Prince Charming was approaching me. He asked if I was okay, and helped me up. His hands were rough and big, really sexy. He asked me my name and I replied "Veronica" he said his name was Dylan. Then we both picked up all the CDs and put them on the rack. I thanked him, and then got in line and bought my movie. He was right behind me, a bottle of wine and a box of pizza. He whispered in my ear that the movie I had picked up was supposed to be a good one. So I asked him if he had any plans for the night, and invited him over. We rode in my car, to my apartment. Finally we get in the door and I take off my winter jacket. I can feel his eyes on me as I hang up my coat in the closet. I grab two wine glasses out of the cupboard and pour the wine, I also throw the pizza in the oven. We both sit down, as I put the movie in. I grab a blanket and ask if he would like one he says he's ok. I hand him his wine, our hands touching. I felt a spark of heat and electricity spark between us, I could see the lust in his eyes as I felt the warmth growing inside me, between my legs. We both realized and just laughed it off. I cover up with the blanket while the movie plays, the beginning is surprisingly scary enough I jumped a few times. Dylan, sat closer and asked to share the blanket. It made me so hot, being so close to this gorgeous man. I couldn't get him off my mind. I laid against him, feeling pretty comfortable with him. He wrapped his arm around me, and started rubbing my arm. Eventually he started rubbing my back, and then my upper ass. I was breathing a little heavier, then when his hand got lower I couldn't help but moan softly. I felt his manhood growing in his pants, against my side. He took my hand and put it right on top of his trousers. Dylan, looked at me, want in his eyes. He ordered me to get up, so I did, and then turn around. While I was looking at the television, I wondered what he was going to do. At this point I was so horny I didn't even care, I wanted him so bad, needed him to be inside. He slapped my ass. It stung at first, then I felt the warmth, it was making me even more wet then before. He pulled down my pants all at once, only showing my bare bottom and little lace material up my ass. He said "Your ass is amazing." And grabbed both ass cheeks hard, kissing them and squeezing them. Dylan turned me around and ripped my shirt right off, exposing me in just my matching bra and panties. I felt a little embarrassed of the big wet spot in the front of my crotch. All of the sudden the oven alarm goes off and the pizza is done. I put on my robe and get it out of the oven, cut it up and put it on a plate for us. We talk a little bit more while we're eating the pizza and get to know each other better. We finally finish, and Dylan says "Where did we leave off?" With a smirk on his face, he lays me down and gets on top of me, kissing me so intimately. I am so turned on, my arms automatically go around his neck, and through his luscious locks. He pulls off my robe and starts to kiss my shoulder, going down my arm, to my hips and kissing right on my belly button. He releases my bra and firmly takes my breasts in his hands, and then to his soft lips. Licking my nipples and rubbing down my legs I can't help but moan. He takes his time on each nipple, sucking and licking, making it so hard. He reaches in between my thighs, and finds my wet spot. He pulls my lace underwear to the side. Sal touches my fleshy folds, so moist and warm. With one hand on my ass, he rubs hard on my clit, taking me over the edge with pleasure. I cry out, releasing so much of my juice onto hand, he licks it all off, and lowers his head positioning it between my legs, he sticks a finger in my pussy and starts fucking it, while he starts to lick my clit and clean up the mess I just made. I'm already close again, this felt so good. I can't help myself, my muscles tighten and I start shaking as my orgasm takes over, my body spazzing out as I finish in his mouth. I get on top of him, taking off his shirt. I start kissing all over his chest, his hard, sexy abdomen. I lick right down the middle, to the lining of his pants, feeling his hot bulge with my hand. I unbuckle his pants and unzip his fly, I grab his growing member in my small hands, amazed at how big this mans cock is. I start to stroke his thick, hard cock, his voice husky as he tells me to suck on it. So I kiss the tip, and lick his shaft, from top to bottom. Finally I take his big member and put it all in my mouth, down my throat he starts to fuck my face, hard, deep, I can't stop gagging. He likes it. Finally he is on the verge of cumming, he pulls out of my mouth and gets up, I get on all fours as he enters me from behind. The tip of his dick slides right in, with the rest of his shaft. Pure ecstasy as we both are moaning. My pussy is so wet, it's dripping out every time he pulls back while fucking me. He starts to pull my hair, as he then grabs my hips and pulls me deeper into him. He then lays down, and I get on top of him, I grab his cock, and rub it on my pussy, then on my clit. Feels so amazing, as i then slide my liquid warmth on his cock. Riding Dylan, I feel every inch of his thick member. He smacks and grabs my ass really hard, stinging for a bit as the pain goes away, it turns me on even more. He whispers in my ear, Veronica, you dirty slut, cum for your me. I look deep in his eyes, seeing passion as I release my sweet nectar all over his cock, screaming his name as he pulls me deeper, and I feel his hot seed on my womb. I instantly cum again, feeling his hot cum inside me. Sal ended up staying over, as we held each other tight all night. Not getting too much sleep, we couldn't keep our hands off each other.
 
Put some Para-breaks in that MASS of text, it'll get read more often.
 
At least in spirit, this is meant to be a board where you discuss stories that are already posted in Literotica. This is not a place to put your story up for review and editing. That said, people will be willing to read and help anyway, but you need to format so it's readable.

Did you do this on a phone or other mobile device? B/c that loss of paragraph breaks seems to happen when people upload from those.
 
Someone got inspired...
You have two "Sal"s there that you need to change into Dylan.
There are some minor typos aswell that you should correct.
 
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