first published story today!

[nakedsteve]

Proud and excited... would appreciate any feedback, either here, PMs, or on the story page. Thanks in advance

https://www.literotica.com/s/first-times-getting-sucked

 

[blozo]

Nice first effort

Not my preferred genre, but a good deal less awkward than my first effort, which is now downright painful for me to read.

Keep working.

 

[nakedsteve]

Not my preferred genre, but a good deal less awkward than my first effort, which is now downright painful for me to read.

Keep working.

I see what your preferred genre is.... I had many sister fantasies growing up. As a teenager she had the most amazing puffy nipples I've ever seen. I'd try to see her naked any chance I got. Once we played a little show and tell in my bed. so hot!

 

[blozo]

I see what your preferred genre is.... I had many sister fantasies growing up. As a teenager she had the most amazing puffy nipples I've ever seen. I'd try to see her naked any chance I got. Once we played a little show and tell in my bed. so hot!

Glad you enjoyed one of my stories!
But I guess I should have specified preferred reading, not writing genre.
My sisters are nasty witches, my mom died before I got to know her well, and my daughter is, bless her heart, about the least sexy woman on earth.
I write incest because it's popular.
The closest thing I've written to my preferred reading genre is called "The Babymaker of Springwood", easily my favorite, but sadly, no red H.

Sigh.

 

[yukonnights]

First, welcome to Lit as a new author. Someone else will tell you this if I don't, so: This is not the best Forum to seek feedback. There is a specific one named Story Feedback where you will probably get more response.

Regarding your story; First, you have a pretty good feel for writing the words. For a first story, it's not the best or the worst I've seen. I guess one could say this is a story in the sense there's an arc of change to you the protagonist. But in general, it falls very short of a full fleshed out tale. In the local vernacular, this one would be described as a "stroker"—which also have a good sized audience or fans. So if this is the type of story you want to write there are some who like this. It's not at all uncommon for first story attempts to turn out this way—my own is way too short (which I further fleshed out but under a different title - duh!) Anyway, bravo for jumping into the pond. For what it's worth, I would encourage you to read up on what constitutes a complete story. There's a wealth of info on-line, so might as well be the best you can be.