Let me know what you think. http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=52348
First attempt at erotic writting
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jon.hayworth
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It was a nicely crafted story. By the end of the first para I was hooked and stayed that way until the end.
Technically you had done well editting and polishing it. There were no obvious howlers in spelling or grammar.
It was good!
jon
Technically you had done well editting and polishing it. There were no obvious howlers in spelling or grammar.
It was good!
jon
the_bragis
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This story is good, extremely good.
It's well written and easy to read. I got right into this right from the first paragraph. There are no verbose descriptions and frivolous time wasting dialogs, just enough to make me want to keep reading, and I did.
I know I read somewherehere in Literotica when giving feedback, I should look for something I liked and something I didn't like about the story, and comment accordingly. Ok..... I'm really disappointed there is no chapter two.
Since this is your first effort at writing erotica, I am looking forward to reading more, especially Vicki's bdsm experiences.
Have a great day,
Alex(fem)
It's well written and easy to read. I got right into this right from the first paragraph. There are no verbose descriptions and frivolous time wasting dialogs, just enough to make me want to keep reading, and I did.
I know I read somewherehere in Literotica when giving feedback, I should look for something I liked and something I didn't like about the story, and comment accordingly. Ok..... I'm really disappointed there is no chapter two.
Since this is your first effort at writing erotica, I am looking forward to reading more, especially Vicki's bdsm experiences.
Have a great day,
Alex(fem)
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DannyBoyUK
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Very promising stuff !
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