Finally..my first story!

[NeoM_25]

Ok, readers and writers....

My story is entitled Subway, and it's in the Erotic Couplings section.

Here's the link:

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=58020

Please read and give feedback if you wish!

 

[ladyphoenix]

Subway

Hey...that was GREAT!!

I read it quickly, bothered in split second intervals here and there by some REALLY minor grammar stuff, but was so carried away by the whole exchange that I couldn't stop reading long enough to care.

A definite five...thanks for the great read!!

 

[NeoM_25]

Why thanks ma'am...

Well thanks so much Lady Phoenix! Very nice of you to offer such praise...

I've heard I may need to proofread a little closer next time, and will do so. But I'm pleased with the feedback I'm getting--especially your comments! (why do I feel like I just got a good grade on a term paper??)

I should have another story up in the next few days...that, or my dirty mind will come up with something, I'm sure...

 

[Savai]

ohh I loved it, thanks.. I look forward to reading more from you.. Short and hot just like I like.

 

[PumpkinSmasher]

Very nice story

 

[wife_trainer]

Nice!

Good story!

 

[wife_trainer]

Whoops..incomplete message

Please keep the stories coming!

 

[NeoM_25]

The second story is up if you are interested...

A little dirtier than the first, I admit....well..maybe a lot dirtier...lol

Here's the link:

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=58021

Comments--good and bad--appreciated as always!