Filius--request for comments on story

[Hitman7]

Hello guys,

How are you? I'm not new to Literotica, as I've been a long time reader of stories and follower of the site. It is my first time to be a writer though. So I present to you, my first two cracks at writing an erotic story.

It's called Filius, which means 'son' in Latin. It's basically about a son who witness his mother having sex with his classmate.

I would like to warn you though that it contains some cuckoldry, humiliation, and interracial.

So to those who don't like those genre and even hate it to the highest level, just don't read any further.

To those who can tolerate it however, I'll appreciate it if you can comment and even critique it. I don't mind harsh words and review from you guys. My skin is thick, and I just want to become a better writer.

Chapter 1
http://www.literotica.com/s/filius-ch-01

Chapter 2
http://www.literotica.com/s/filius-ch-02


Cheers,
Hitman7

 

[buggiez]

I really like this theme, "a son who witness his mother having sex with his classmate". and hope mother do it willingly, not by force.

mother, who can't resist alfa-male classmate, and have passionate hot sex with him. The fact that the son is to see it even more exciting for her. mmm... that story I want to read.

add more sex scenes in your story, and make chapters longer ))

hope they will be soon.

You write good story so far, thank you!

 

[kakashi524]

I don't know what I can say about the story other than: So far, I like everything about it. I feel you are doing great so far.

 

[Thorntak]

I like fantasies like this. Especially when the woman is a willing reluctant.