Hey all, this is my second story ever written and is a follow up to my first ever story Songstress, found in the Mature category.
I’ve taken the feedback I received from my story and added this elements into this second instalment to what is turning out to be a series of the musical love story of my two main characters- Beth and Joel. To wit:
Added in conflict to provide contrast to the story
Tried to avoid implausible scenes
Kept the pacing even
You can find both stories by clicking in my signature below.
Here are a couple of excerpts:
She resumed her blowjob, exploring every inch with mouth and fingers, caressing my balls ever so gently. I was rock hard now and Beth pulled away to stare at my cock in delight, while slowly pulling my foreskin up and down.
Without a word, she crawled up my body and straddling me, she lined us up and sank onto my shaft. Oh God, there was that incredible tightness of her tunnel again! Beth groaned in a low tone that sent shivers through me. She opened her eyes and bent down towards me, her face inches from mine, and she began humming a nameless tune in that rich sultry alto of hers.
So here I am, my cock squeezed in her wet, gripping tunnel, staring into the blue infinity of her spectacular eyes, listening to her ethereal humming, and thinking to myself, there's no way heaven itself could match this!
I moaned and said to her: "Geez babe, you don't fight fair!"
She chuckled: "What woman ever does? Besides, you know what they say about love and war."
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"So, Joel, we ain't got much time before she comes back, and I ain't one to beat about the bushes...what in the name of all that is holy are you doing with my daughter? You, a man closer to my age than hers, taking advantage of my daughter's sweet nature, vulnerability, good looks, and for what? To convince yourself you still got it? To put a trophy on your arm? To latch on to some young piece of flesh so you can get it up again? You're nothing but a lecherous old man and have no business being with my angel. Y'all should be disgusted and ashamed of yourself!"
I’ve taken the feedback I received from my story and added this elements into this second instalment to what is turning out to be a series of the musical love story of my two main characters- Beth and Joel. To wit:
Added in conflict to provide contrast to the story
Tried to avoid implausible scenes
Kept the pacing even
You can find both stories by clicking in my signature below.
Here are a couple of excerpts:
She resumed her blowjob, exploring every inch with mouth and fingers, caressing my balls ever so gently. I was rock hard now and Beth pulled away to stare at my cock in delight, while slowly pulling my foreskin up and down.
Without a word, she crawled up my body and straddling me, she lined us up and sank onto my shaft. Oh God, there was that incredible tightness of her tunnel again! Beth groaned in a low tone that sent shivers through me. She opened her eyes and bent down towards me, her face inches from mine, and she began humming a nameless tune in that rich sultry alto of hers.
So here I am, my cock squeezed in her wet, gripping tunnel, staring into the blue infinity of her spectacular eyes, listening to her ethereal humming, and thinking to myself, there's no way heaven itself could match this!
I moaned and said to her: "Geez babe, you don't fight fair!"
She chuckled: "What woman ever does? Besides, you know what they say about love and war."
…
"So, Joel, we ain't got much time before she comes back, and I ain't one to beat about the bushes...what in the name of all that is holy are you doing with my daughter? You, a man closer to my age than hers, taking advantage of my daughter's sweet nature, vulnerability, good looks, and for what? To convince yourself you still got it? To put a trophy on your arm? To latch on to some young piece of flesh so you can get it up again? You're nothing but a lecherous old man and have no business being with my angel. Y'all should be disgusted and ashamed of yourself!"
