Feedback - Taming the Asshole, Ch. 1 & 2

[P. B. Walker]

Hi all,

I just submitted two new stories. The story still has one or two chapters to go, but if you'd like to check out the first two chapters and give any feedback, it would be greatly appreciated. This is my first attempt at creating a character that transforms into something better by the end of the story. Both stories are in the Group Sex category and involve oral, anal, swapping, and straight sex (there is a very slight hint into BDSM but I do not touch on that much in these two stories). Here are the links:

Taming the Asshole, Ch. 1

Taming the Asshole, Ch. 2

I appreciate votes if you vote on the merits of the story.

Thanks.

PBW

 

[lilminx]

i just read part I, and I really liked it. I loved the hints at D/s.

 

[P. B. Walker]

Thank you lilminx I'm working on part 3 now... and I think the D/s part will definitely come into play alot more. But I don't think it will end up being anywhere near hardcore D/s. So hopefully most readers will still enjoy reading the story.

- PBW