Feedback Requested - Incest story

[Bebop3]

Hi,

I'd appreciate a fresh pair of eyes taking a look at a story I'm working on.

If you wouldn't mind sharing your thoughts, please shoot me a pm with your email address and I'll send it your way.

Thanks!

 

[ElectricBlue]

Hi,

I'd appreciate a fresh pair of eyes taking a look at a story I'm working on.

If you wouldn't mind sharing your thoughts, please shoot me a pm with your email address and I'll send it your way.

Thanks!

Wrong forum really - you're actually looking for an editor or beta reader.

The idea of this Forum is to discuss stories that have already been submitted and published. You might get lucky, but you can also "Report" your own post (little button bottom left of your post) and ask for the whole thread to be moved across to the Editor's Forum. You'll get a better response there.

BTW, anyone can "Report" a story - I do it when people start "Looking for a Story" threads in this Forum. People can also report spam, flaming, questionable content, personal email links. It's a way Lit users can help moderate the site.

 

[Bebop3]

Thanks. I appreciate the tips. If the admins move it or delete it, I'll certainly understand.

Wrong forum really - you're actually looking for an editor or beta reader.

The idea of this Forum is to discuss stories that have already been submitted and published. You might get lucky, but you can also "Report" your own post (little button bottom left of your post) and ask for the whole thread to be moved across to the Editor's Forum. You'll get a better response there.

BTW, anyone can "Report" a story - I do it when people start "Looking for a Story" threads in this Forum. People can also report spam, flaming, questionable content, personal email links. It's a way Lit users can help moderate the site.

 

[ElectricBlue]

Thanks. I appreciate the tips. If the admins move it or delete it, I'll certainly understand.

It won't get deleted, but will get moved - as I say, I could ask for it to be moved, or you can.

As you're new to writing here, I figured you might not even know about the reporting function, nor the self-moderating the site allows - it all contributes to a more civilised community where folk stick around and join in.

 

[8letters]

Here's my general advice on writing erotica:
1. Have an interesting premise
2. Have two likeable characters who have an obvious attraction for each other
3. Get into telling us about #1 and #2 quickly
4. Describe your characters when they are introduced. Give an amount of description based upon how important they are to the story
5. Your characters shouldn’t come into existence when they appear in your story. They should have a backstory and an age-appropriate on-going life. In particular, they should have a reason for being unattached at that moment
6. Every fact about your character and every action they take has implications. Be sure that your story is consistent with those implications. A main character has a six-pack stomach? That’s has a lot of implications for how he spends his time and the people he knows. A main character drives a top-of-the-line Mercedes convertible? That has huge implications for her tastes and the life she lives
7. Avoid omniscient writer syndrome where what you write makes sense because of facts you know but haven’t told the reader
8. Show. Don’t tell

If you want feedback specific to your story, shoot me a PM.

 

[Bebop3]

If you want feedback specific to your story, shoot me a PM.

Thanks and I may take you up on that, but I'd prefer to not take you away from your writing.

I prefer reading to writing, so the sooner your next story is published the better.

 

[8letters]

Thanks and I may take you up on that, but I'd prefer to not take you away from your writing.

I prefer reading to writing, so the sooner your next story is published the better.

In that case, I could send you what I've written so far and you could tell me what you think. I've already done one major rewrite based on early feedback.

 

[bobi596]

I might be able to help ...send it to me at

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[Bebop3]

I might be able to help ...send it to me at

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Sent! Thank you.