I submitted my first story recently called "A Gift for My Dad" (incest). I would be interested in comments, suggestions or critique on any part of the story. Thanks for taking the time to read my humble efforts.
I thought it was good. The only gentle critisicm would be that the thoughts and actions of Beth (I think that was her name, I am going off of memory here after a quick glance at the story)were a little wordly and experience for a virgin.
AJ
PS by quick glance I mean that success has increased volume to the point that I can read a few stories well, or most of the stories quickly. Most of them do not survive the first paragraph. Yours kept me reading most of the way to the end.
AJ
Kerrie
Thanks for taking the time to read my story and giving me your thoughts. I appreciate your encouragement and perhaps next time I will manage something more suspenseful and less predictable!! You never know....
