Feedback Please On Kinky Sissy Poem

[Sissy Adele Howells]

Would love some feedback on my kinky sissy poem.I realise it wont be to everyones taste but I can take criticism. Had a good response so far and thanks for an early public comment.

"Kinky Bonking Belinda" http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=240076

Thanks for your Time
Sissy Adele

 

[Tathagata]

Eve will comment
she loves this stuff

 

[Guest]

Eve will comment
she loves this stuff

Thank goddess for Eve!

 

[Angeline]

Well, it does have an interesting singsongy nursery-rhyme quality that fits with the subject. I like continuity in a poem.

 

[fire child]

Would love some feedback on my kinky sissy poem.I realise it wont be to everyones taste but I can take criticism. Had a good response so far and thanks for an early public comment.

"Kinky Bonking Belinda" http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=240076

Thanks for your Time
Sissy Adele

Not really something I'd normally read, but I'll be damned if that didn't leave me grinning. I'm not the best to take critic from, but I have to say I enjoyed it. A lot of mine poems have a repetitvie nursery rhyme quality to them, so I can appreciate more of the same.

 

[Sissy Adele Howells]

Thank You For Your Kind Comments

Hi,
Want to thank you all for your kind comments. Would appreciate more, whether you liked it or not. I am very proud of this poem and is the best I have written so far.
LOVE AND KISSES
SISSY ADELE HOWELLS

PS YOU ARE A PRETTY MUMMY BELINDA.

 

[Angeline]

Hi,
Want to thank you all for your kind comments. Would appreciate more, whether you liked it or not. I am very proud of this poem and is the best I have written so far.
LOVE AND KISSES
SISSY ADELE HOWELLS

PS YOU ARE A PRETTY MUMMY BELINDA.

Hi and forgive me for not welcoming you here more directly yesterday. I have to admit your poem made me laugh. It's not my style, but it's clever and funny on its own terms--nothing wrong with that!

 

[WickedEve]

Eve will comment
she loves this stuff

UH!
Well, I might.
I have to read it first.

 

[WickedEve]

I have a short attention span. The poem is way too long for me. But the rhyme works. It's amusing and has attitude.
I read all the way down to these lines, which are hysterical:
What a lovely naked body you have,
Shaved your body of all your hair,
Mummy Belinda rubs in pink, baby lotion,
Over your bum, willy and balls,
Whose a kinky Amy Beynon then?"