Innuendos
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- Feb 9, 2012
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Howdy folks,
Recently put out a new story titled 'Patchwork Knight', a short story that is in some respects a sort of contemporary fantasy. It's gotten some wildly different reactions, positive and negative, and I'm looking to make sense of the ratings that it's gotten, as well as some of the feedback.
http://www.literotica.com/s/patchwork-knight
My main concern is coherence, as it was noted that the structure is somewhat confusing. The story switches back and forth at a consistent pace between the protagonists past and present, shedding light on his current situation, and setting the stage for a conflict later in the story.
If anyone could give it a look-see, tell me what works for it and what doesn't, it would be greatly appreciated. Stuff like the clarity of what's going on, and whether it works as a standalone story. It's meant to feature characters from a previously written and longer work titled "Sweet Dreams Are Made of This", and I'm not sure if I made it too dependent on that story or of it works by itself.
Recently put out a new story titled 'Patchwork Knight', a short story that is in some respects a sort of contemporary fantasy. It's gotten some wildly different reactions, positive and negative, and I'm looking to make sense of the ratings that it's gotten, as well as some of the feedback.
http://www.literotica.com/s/patchwork-knight
My main concern is coherence, as it was noted that the structure is somewhat confusing. The story switches back and forth at a consistent pace between the protagonists past and present, shedding light on his current situation, and setting the stage for a conflict later in the story.
If anyone could give it a look-see, tell me what works for it and what doesn't, it would be greatly appreciated. Stuff like the clarity of what's going on, and whether it works as a standalone story. It's meant to feature characters from a previously written and longer work titled "Sweet Dreams Are Made of This", and I'm not sure if I made it too dependent on that story or of it works by itself.