feedback on Teacher, Teacher (ch.1 and 2)

[BlueSwede]

Ch. 2 is my fourth submission, and I have never gotten any feedback on my stories. I would like to hear your opinions on what I'm doing right and what I could improve upon.
I would also appreciate it if you would read my other stories (Freeman's Passion, Speaking in Tongues, New Years Eve) and comment on them as well. Thanks.

 

[Weird Harold]

Ch. 2 is my fourth submission, and I have never gotten any feedback on my stories. I would like to hear your opinions on what I'm doing right and what I could improve upon.
I would also appreciate it if you would read my other stories (Freeman's Passion, Speaking in Tongues, New Years Eve) and comment on them as well. Thanks.

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Also, I noticed you have "no e-mail provided" under your author's name although you do have anonymous feedback enabled. I can't speaak for others, but I generally prefer a direct e-mail address when I give feedback because my e-mail editor is eaasier to use than the anonymous feedback text box. (My e-mail program also has spellcheck, which I need badly right now until I get used to this new keyboard.)