Feedback on "Send" much appreciated, teetering on 4.5

[Themoodyone]

Hello fellow Erotica writers and enthusiasts. I would be very greatful for some feedback on my first Novelette "Send". First two chapters posted, third will be up soon. Looking for my red "H" Advice needed.

Thanks in advance.

"Send" click to read

 

[_Lynn_]

You'll get more help if you post a link to your story. We're a lazy lot here.

 

[Themoodyone]

Thanks! Here it is. "Send" Let me know what you think.