Feedback on New Sory

[Whanmore]

I am a new Lit author and I plan on writing Dozens of stories. Would love any feedback before I start to post more. Its an Erotica Coupling story with some First time vibes and Nonconsent/reluctance as well .

https://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=5715413&page=submissions

 

[AlinaX]

The writing's okay, but it's very descriptive of events and I don't connect with the characters.

Let me just say this: As a writer, your aim should be to seduce the reader, not merely have them as a witness.

 

[Whanmore]

The writing's okay, but it's very descriptive of events and I don't connect with the characters.

Let me just say this: As a writer, your aim should be to seduce the reader, not merely have them as a witness.

Thanks for the feedback. I only just saw this. today. I'll definitely be looking for more of that in upcoming stories