Feedback on my story!

[Coquetteprincess]

here’s the plot: a shy college virgin sneaks away from her awful jock bf (he’s a jerk and deserves it) to be with her slightly older and rlly sexy British lover man

I know there are a few typos, I’m sorry!! I got overexcited! It won’t happen again.

I’m looking for feedback on the story itself especially the sex part so I can try to improve for my next one.

I’m trying to get away from the noncon genre of my previous (deleted) stories so I apologize if it isn’t as hot as my other ones. It’ll take practice

https://www.literotica.com/s/losing-my-virginity-to-my-lover

 

[AlinaX]

Are you sure he's British? Sounds so much sexier with a French accent.

 

[Coquetteprincess]

Are you sure he's British? Sounds so much sexier with a French accent.

Oh I think you may be onto something

 

[StillStunned]

In my experience - a long time ago, I'll admit, possibly even in a galaxy far, far away - American women will swoon just fine at a British accent.

 

[AlinaX]

I'm British, though. I have class prejudices built into me.

 

[StillStunned]

I'm British, though. I have class prejudices built into me.

Well, I was always told that I lacked any class.

 

[Coquetteprincess]

In my experience - a long time ago, I'll admit, possibly even in a galaxy far, far away - American women will swoon just fine at a British accent.

I'm British, though. I have class prejudices built into me.

Yeah, I forgot that British accents are only swoon-worthy when you’re not British yourself XD otherwise it’s just what you hear every day

 

[PrimalDual]

otherwise it’s just what you hear every day

Similar to "I tell him that I only eat Indian food (and we just call it food) at my parents' house."