Feedback on my stories

[The Spaz]

I was hoping that I would get some constructive criticism on my stories.

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=170019
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=176213
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=180401
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=182855

Any thoughtful opinions would be appreciated!

 

[NoJo]

Fixed up your vBCode a little. Links should work.

I was hoping that I would get some constructive criticism on my stories.

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=170019

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=176213

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=180401

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=182855

Any thoughtful opinions would be appreciated!

 

[The Spaz]

Thank you!!!!