Feedback on my latest story

[geraldf]

Hello. I've just posted my second story, Anna's Virgin and I'd love to hear your thoughts on it. It's the story of a twenty-six-year-old virgin who is given a very special gift by his beautiful upstairs neighbor.

literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=84076

Thanks for reading and I hope you enjoy it.

geraldf

 

[geraldf]

Correct link

I'm not sure if that link will get you there. Try this one:

http://literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=84076

 

[geraldf]

I'm really computer challenged.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=84076

 

[Lauren Hynde]

Anna's Virgin
by geraldf ©

 

[geraldf]

Thanks

 

[Victoria Veiss]

There's still something wrong with your link, as it won't click thru, but I pasted it into my browser and found the story.

I noticed only a few minor typos. Nothing of note. Overall, I liked the story a great deal. It was not typical of those found on Literotica. Erotic, because of the man's longings and fantasies, but not straight-to-the-point porno. It starts out as if it will lead to a fairly generic encounter, but there are hints that it is developing differently, and it does.

Your characters are low-key and realistic, but vivid. Some people might call the protagonist pathetic, but he doesn't strike me that way. He's a gentle soul who deserves to find someone who will cherish him. The mood is a little sad and yearning, but in the end uplifting and hopeful. An excellent job. Celebrating innocence and virginity isn't very common here, but it was appropriate for this story.

Vicky

 

[geraldf]

Thank-you, Vicky.