Feedback on my latest chapter

[thebobber326]

https://literotica.com/s/grace-breaks-caitlin-ch-04
I wrote a part 4 to my Grace Breaks Caitlin series. This one took a lot more time and effort so I'd love some feedback.

 

[thomas1965]

What kind of feed back ?
Grammar, spelling, punctuation, readability, character, plot ?

 

[thebobber326]

What kind of feed back ?
Grammar, spelling, punctuation, readability, character, plot ?

I guess plot would be mostly what I'm looking for, and some character feedback but I'll take anything you are willing to give.