Feedback on my Indian story and points for a possible sequel?

[sweetdreamssss]

This is the story I wrote where a landlord seduces his 2 tenants...Special care was made to make the landlord look ugly ..

Please give ur feedback and if possible some directions to write a sequel

https://www.literotica.com/s/indian-landlord-vs-the-tenant-girls

Note : the confusion is cleared and now it's bavk online

 

[vanmyers86]

My best advice is to get a good editor who is a native speaker of English. I honor your attempt at writing a story in English (I am not proficient enough in another language to attempt such a feat), but the many grammar errors and missing words made it difficult for me to continue reading, and I stopped before finishing the first page. A careful editor would help enormously with those issues.

Best wishes to you!

 

[Jada59]

I tried but it says the story is waiting for approval.

 

[ElectricBlue]

I tried but it says the story is waiting for approval.

That means it's been reported and taken down by Laurel. It will be up to the OP to address the rejection reason and resubmit.

 

[Jada59]

That means it's been reported and taken down by Laurel. It will be up to the OP to address the rejection reason and resubmit.

Ah. Okay. Thanks!

 

[Tabithablack]

That means it's been reported and taken down by Laurel. It will be up to the OP to address the rejection reason and resubmit.

Maybe because it says 'Indian' and one of the sites countless political snowflakes screamed at the owner it "It should be indigenous people!"

 

[UsuallyPresent]

Don't think so. I've seen many slurs and 'bad words' in many different stories that have been published on Literotica, many much, much worse than "Indian".

 

[sweetdreamssss]

That means it's been reported and taken down by Laurel. It will be up to the OP to address the rejection reason and resubmit.

It's because i wrote this story long ago and published under another name 'madiha'....i dont know of literorica doesn't allow authors to publish their original content in different sites

 

[ElectricBlue]

It's because i wrote this story long ago and published under another name 'madiha'....i dont know of literorica doesn't allow authors to publish their original content in different sites

You can publish wherever you want- you own the content. Did you publish it here on Lit as Madiha? If so, that could explain the take down - to remove duplicate content.

 

[sweetdreamssss]

You can publish wherever you want- you own the content. Did you publish it here on Lit as Madiha? If so, that could explain the take down - to remove duplicate content.

I published in xnxx as Madiha ..i discovered literotica very late in my life and tried to reproduce my stories..

 

[ElectricBlue]

I published in xnxx as Madiha ..i discovered literotica very late in my life and tried to reproduce my stories..

To publish here then, you need to address whatever has been flagged in your rejection notice. The site uses several generic rejection notices (phrased as questions), so you have to figure out what applies to your story, and submit an edited version (or a note to the editor as to why you believe it already complies).

 

[sweetdreamssss]

To publish here then, you need to address whatever has been flagged in your rejection notice. The site uses several generic rejection notices (phrased as questions), so you have to figure out what applies to your story, and submit an edited version (or a note to the editor as to why you believe it already complies).

The confusion is now cleared and it's bavk online