FINLEYDIXON
LuvLoox betr'n Color
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Hi Literotica,
I've had a lot of fun writing my series about gay couplings on a high school swim team. Some readers have already made it clear what parts of that storyline are working.
Still, I'd like to know what would make that narrative better. Should I always end with a sex scene? Is there too much dialog? What might make my scene more steamy?
https://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=6083942&page=submissions
Looking forward to inputs.
Thanks,
Finley
I've had a lot of fun writing my series about gay couplings on a high school swim team. Some readers have already made it clear what parts of that storyline are working.
Still, I'd like to know what would make that narrative better. Should I always end with a sex scene? Is there too much dialog? What might make my scene more steamy?
https://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=6083942&page=submissions
Looking forward to inputs.
Thanks,
Finley
